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Some people think the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spend elsewhere.

Some people think the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spend elsewhere. j6Aw
Government financially supports art, but in some people opinion it’s unnecessary. Because they think there is a lots of other fields that needs attention and spending money on it. In my point Art is one of the important and significant sphere of human activity and is need money for sustainable developing. Thought art humanity shares ideas and creativity. And ideas have power to changing world. Because from history of society we know that art was a tool and way of expressing ourselves. For example, every historical event and every life significant moments were shown in art. That’s why art is important. Despite that, some people think about art as if it’s something that we don’t need in our lives, something not so important and additional. Because of some iconoclasts does things out of normality and express themselves inappropriate way through art and touching by these sensitive ones who reacting on this type of art negatively. Consequently, these individuals assigned by people as if they did crime and this issues can cause misunderstanding between author and public. That’s why some people thinks about art as something that’s not need financial support. In conclusion, art is important just by one case it’s develops society and makes world better. Because people using it for sharing them creativity and active position.
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attention and spending money on it. In my point
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is one of the
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important
and significant sphere of human activity and is
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money for sustainable developing.

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art
humanity shares
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ideas
and creativity. And
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ideas
have power to changing world.
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Because
from history of society we know that
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art
was a tool and way of expressing ourselves.
For example
, every historical
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event
and every life significant moments
were shown
in
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art
. That’s why
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art
is
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important
.

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people
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as if it’s something that we don’t
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of
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iconoclasts does things out of normality and express themselves inappropriate way through
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art
and touching by these sensitive ones who reacting on this type of
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art
negatively
.
Consequently
, these individuals assigned by
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people
as if they did crime and this issues can cause misunderstanding between author and public. That’s why
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some
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people
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thinks
about
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art
as something that’s not
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need
financial support.

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,
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art
is
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important
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just
by one case it’s develops society and
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makes
world better.
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Because
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people
using it for sharing them creativity and active position.
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IELTS essay Some people think the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spend elsewhere.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
217 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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