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Some people think that Zoos are cruel and should be closed down others however believe that Zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people think that Zoos are cruel and should be closed down others however believe that Zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals discuss both views and give your opinion NOrm
Flora and fauna is important to maintain the balance of Earth. There is a debatable issue whether Zoos ought to shut down due to their atrocities behaviour or they play an important role in protecting wild animals. This essay will substantiate the both views along with my opinion by my conviction side is with later view in the subsequent paragraphs. To begin with, there are numerous reasons why advocates of former statement that that juice must closed down. Firstly they think Zoos are only money making businesses because animals of zoo at trained by hook or by crook for the entertainment purpose of animal of people. There is entry fee for every visitor either child or adult to see the animal which means they are only making money. Secondly, being cooped up in cages is hard for animals this is showing the cruel humanity on dumped living beings full stop animals also require freedom for wandering here and there are similar to human beings. However, proponents of latest statement open the reason of importance of Zoos. First and foremost, going to increase in human population, a plethora of forests are cut down which are belong to animals. So use act as the habitat for animals. It also save them from being extinct. Furthermore, lifespan of animals soar in the zoos. For example, due to insufficient of food in natural environment. Expected mother's could not get proper feed in result there chances of not surviving baby animals. Hence, the survival rate of any animals could be increased in Zoos.
Flora and fauna is
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to maintain the balance of Earth. There is a debatable issue whether Zoos ought to shut down due to their atrocities
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behaviour or
they play an
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important
role in protecting wild
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animals
. This essay will substantiate the both views along with my opinion by my conviction side is with later view in the subsequent paragraphs. To
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begin
with, there are numerous reasons why advocates of former statement that that juice
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must
closed down.
Firstly
they
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think
Zoos are
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only
money making businesses
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because
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animals
of zoo at trained by hook or by crook for the entertainment purpose of
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animal
of
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people
. There is entry fee for every visitor either child or adult to
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see
the
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animal
which means they are
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only
making money.
Secondly
,
being cooped
up in cages is
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hard
for
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animals
this is showing the cruel humanity on dumped living beings full
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stop
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animals
also
require freedom for wandering here and there are similar to human beings.
However
, proponents of
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latest
statement open the reason of importance of Zoos.
First
and foremost, going to increase in human population, a plethora of forests are
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cut
down which are
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belong
to
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animals
.
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So
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use
act as the habitat for
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animals
. It
also
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save
them from being extinct.
Furthermore
, lifespan of
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animals
soar in the zoos.
For example
, due to insufficient of food in natural environment.
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Expected
mother's could not
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get
proper feed in result there chances of not surviving baby
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animals
.
Hence
, the survival rate of any
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animals
could
be increased
in Zoos.
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IELTS essay Some people think that Zoos are cruel and should be closed down others however believe that Zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals discuss both views and give your opinion

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
258 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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