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Some people think that youngsters should get involved in unpaid work. Other oppose as it may affect their career.

Some people think that youngsters should get involved in unpaid work. Other oppose as it may affect their career. brVoX
Few individuals deem that younger generation should participate in unpaid social job. However, rest of people claim that it may impact on their future. This essay will delineate both these consideration in the below paragraphs with my opinion in conclusion. On the one hand, young people can gain many benefits when they engage in voluntary task. Firstly, they achieve experience about community. To expand, they know about morals, discipline which is helpful for future. Thus, that built social awareness. Secondly, they learn team work. Meaning, attain lessons about how to manage team members with effective communication and leadership skill that is also called "team building". Thus, they use that to adjust family in future. Lastly, people proud on them because they do a community work to succour others. In other words, person family members and they also get many incredible awards and madels from regime. Therefore, they encourage other men kinds to do unpaid work. For example, Gujarat government every year organized one award ceremony at that time this is broadcasting on every news channels which improve youngsters stamina to do a community service. On the other hand, if young adults give to much attention to voluntary activities in society, they might create detrimental effect on their career. Firstly, they can not concentrate on their education. To eloborate, without giving any attention on academics as a result they lost focus on career and they not know what to do in future like which specialization. Thus, it produce unemployment. For instance, in 2018, Delhi University made one report and they write down that every year around 16% of adult youth are down the track from their career. Finally, they do not finish their study and doing always voluntary job. Meaning, they think that community job is good and not persue for degree and other skills. This, impact more labour class in the country. To recapitulate, there is some evidence to support the youth to involve in nation's work, I believe that take a part on it which is really beneficial for new generation.
Few individuals deem that younger generation should participate in unpaid social job.
However
, rest of
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people
claim that it may impact on their
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future
. This essay will delineate both
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these consideration
in the below paragraphs with my opinion
in conclusion
.

On the one hand, young
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people
can gain
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many
benefits when they engage in voluntary task.
Firstly
, they achieve experience about
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community
. To expand, they know about morals, discipline which is helpful for
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future
.
Thus
, that built social awareness.
Secondly
, they learn team
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work
. Meaning, attain lessons about how to manage team members with effective communication and leadership
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skill
that is
also
called
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"
team building
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"
.
Thus
, they
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use
that to adjust family in
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future
.
Lastly
,
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people
proud on them
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because
they do a
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community
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work
to
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succour
others. In
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other
words, person family
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members and
they
also
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get
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many
incredible awards and
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madels
from regime.
Therefore
, they encourage
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other
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men
kinds to do unpaid
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work
.
For example
, Gujarat
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government
every year organized one award ceremony at that time this is broadcasting on every news channels which
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improve
youngsters stamina to do a
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community
service.

On the
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other
hand, if young adults give
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to
much attention to voluntary activities in society, they might create detrimental effect on their career.
Firstly
, they can not concentrate on their education. To
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eloborate
, without giving any attention on academics
as a result
they lost focus on
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career and
they not know what to do in
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future
like which specialization.
Thus
, it
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produce
unemployment.
For instance
, in 2018, Delhi University made one
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report and
they write down that every year around 16% of adult youth are down the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
track
from their career.
Finally
, they do not finish their study and doing always voluntary job. Meaning, they
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think
that
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community
job is
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good
and not
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persue
for degree and
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other
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skills
. This, impact more
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labour
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class
in the country.

To recapitulate, there is
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some
evidence to support the youth to involve in nation's
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work
, I believe that take a part on it which is
really
beneficial for new generation.
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IELTS essay Some people think that youngsters should get involved in unpaid work. Other oppose as it may affect their career.

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  American English
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342 words
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