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Some people think that young people should leave their home and start living alone.

Some people think that young people should leave their home and start living alone. jVLn8
Independent life can give people more experience and skills to handle difficult situations in their lives. Therefore, it is believed that youngsters ought to abandon their home and begin to live on their own. I think there are several positive aspects to support the statement and they will be described on the following parts of this essay. Firstly, they will learn how to make important decisions to take care of their lives. It is a good opportunity to understand what is a bad decision. Considering a young who just started living alone.
Independent life can give
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people
more experience and
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skills
to handle difficult situations in their
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lives
.
Therefore
, it
is believed
that youngsters ought to abandon their home and
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begin
to
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live
on their
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own
. I
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think
there are several
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positive
aspects to support the
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statement and
they will be
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described
on the following parts of this essay.

Firstly
, they will learn how to
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make
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important
decisions to take care of their
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lives
. It is a
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good
opportunity to understand what is a
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bad
decision. Considering a young who
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just
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started
living alone.
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IELTS essay Some people think that young people should leave their home and start living alone.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
92 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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