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Some people think that women likes shopping than man,what do you say about this issue.

Some people think that women likes shopping than man, what do you say about this issue. GL5Rw
Shopping is the best pleasure for everybody, it makes us merry and sociable. Nearly, many ladies prefer purchase more active than gentlemen. I agree that, mother desire their family be modern and peaceful, she always stuff doing delicious meal, but new clothes, toys, joyful pictures and she sharing households. People never save money for their family because it is very important being lucky. Firstly, in our country men rules the family so he takes all responsibility to himself it may be to earn, shopping, cooking and others. Always they control children education, dressing, going somewhere and to communicate with grown ups. But women to help them to bring up them and to be healthy. In the other hand, some family has its rule and responsibilities. Women to earn much money than men so they want to be leader in family, possible in government. They do neglect husband wage and position that is why, not permit shopping for family members. It impact their character by the way children have not honour for father this family time passes devorse. Secondly, human prefer to go shopping together it develop children career and interests, they learn each other's intellect and speciality. In conclusion, women make shopping herself because they choose good things always for lovely people.
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Shopping
is the best pleasure for everybody, it
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makes
us merry and sociable.
Nearly
,
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many
ladies prefer
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purchase
more active than gentlemen. I
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agree
that, mother desire their
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family
be modern and peaceful, she always
The pronoun 'she' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "stuffs", "stuffed".
stuff
doing delicious meal,
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but
new clothes, toys, joyful
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
pictures and
Did you mean "she's sharing", "she is sharing", or "she was sharing"?
she sharing
households.
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People
never save money for their
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family
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because
it is
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very
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important
being lucky.
Firstly
, in our country
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men
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rules
the
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family
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so
he takes all responsibility to himself it may be to earn,
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shopping
, cooking
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and others
.
The adverb 'Always' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
Always
they control children education, dressing, going somewhere and to communicate with
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
grown ups
.
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But
women to
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help
them to bring up them and to be healthy. In the other hand,
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some
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family
has its
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rule
and responsibilities. Women to earn much money than
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men
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so
they want to be leader in
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family
, possible in
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government
. They do neglect husband wage and position
that is
why, not permit
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shopping
for
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family
members. It
Did you mean "impacts"?
impact
their character by the way children have not
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honour
for father this
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family
time passes
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devorse
.
Secondly
, human prefer to go
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shopping
together it
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develop
children career and interests, they learn each other's intellect and
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speciality
.
In conclusion
, women
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make
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shopping
herself
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because
they choose
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good
things always for lovely
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people
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that women likes shopping than man, what do you say about this issue.

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212 words
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