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Some people think that women are generally more peaceful than men as their characters are naturally more nurturing than aggressive. To what extent do you agree/disagree.

Recently, a debate triggered where a section of society claims that women are more affable and composed than men, whereas others are not in agreement with it. I agree with it because females play a significant, important and compassionate role in everyone’s life. To begin with, women are more compassionate and sensitive towards others. They can easily relate to other’s situation. Furthermore, men are weak in exemplifying emotions and care to people around them. And male chauvinism worsens the situation because it may look them weak while expressing the sentiments and feelings. However, women express compassion easily by socializing, bonding with others and nurturance within the society. Today, they play different roles, for example being a mentor of her kids to face the world or she works full time as a breadwinner of the family. Thus, compassionate instinct is the innate trait in them. For ages, women have been raising and protecting offspring who needed protection while men engaged in herculean tasks of hunting and warfare. Therefore, kindness, gentleness, and warmth have always been associated with females. In addition, men have the tendency of fight or flight in case of stressful situations. However, women embrace hard times with ease and resolve the stress. Therefore, these tendencies confirm that women are affable figures than men. To conclude, women are cool as a cucumber and have composed attitude to develop and nurture the world around them, when compared to men.
Recently, a debate triggered where a section of society claims that
women
are more affable and composed than
men
, whereas others are not in agreement with it. I
agree
with it
because
females play a significant,
important
and compassionate role in everyone’s life.

To
begin
with,
women
are more compassionate and sensitive towards others. They can
easily
relate to
other’s
situation.
Furthermore
,
men
are weak in exemplifying emotions and care to
people
around them. And male chauvinism worsens the situation
because
it may look them weak while expressing the sentiments and feelings.
However
,
women
express compassion
easily
by socializing, bonding with others and nurturance within the society.
Today
, they play
different
roles,
for example
being a mentor of her kids to face the
world or
she works full time as a breadwinner of the family.
Thus
, compassionate instinct is the innate trait in them.

For ages,
women
have been raising and protecting offspring who needed protection while
men
engaged in
herculean
tasks of hunting and warfare.
Therefore
, kindness, gentleness, and warmth have always
been associated
with females.
In addition
,
men
have the tendency of fight or flight in case of stressful situations.
However
,
women
embrace
hard
times with
ease
and resolve the
stress
.
Therefore
, these tendencies confirm that
women
are affable figures than
men
.

To conclude
,
women
are cool as a cucumber and have composed attitude to develop and nurture the world around them, when compared to
men
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that women are generally more peaceful than men as their characters are naturally more nurturing than aggressive.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
238 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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