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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs.

Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. 5E8N
According to the given statement when a person travels to some other place or a city he should adapt himself/herself according to their relevant culture and practices as well. I am totally satisfied with this statement and the logic behind is when you travel to some new place you do not have any ideas or very little idea of that particular place everything seems new to you and most probably people may speak different languages their accent may differ their foods, water, clothing, hair styles, gait almost everything that you are not familiar with may differ. Hence it is much better to adapt yourself according to the place where you have moved because it will help you to acclimatization your body according to the environment in which you have to live. For example I myself have faced such situations when I had to move to the Northern areas of Pakistan as they are extremely cold and there the temperature is quite low so that you can’t even think of living in such conditions unless you have some proper arrangements of any heating systems like an electric heater but unfortunately there was no electricity in that area so there natives have ways to survive in that cold of snow by burning woods which they used to cut from the high mountains and these woods were their prime source of survival and in food they used to eat meat a lot and drink tea and coffee specially at night before going to sleep. There the paths and road are always steep so you have to be very careful whenever you are on the roads unfortunately if you slip then there is a risk of losing your life because deep down there is a deadly slope. Therefore, in my opinion if you want to survive in any different culture then you must follow their natives which will eventually help you to live there with ease and safety.
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given
statement when a person travels to
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place
or a city he should adapt himself/herself
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according
to their relevant culture and practices
as well
. I am
totally
satisfied with this statement and the logic behind is when you travel to
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new
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place
you do not have any
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ideas
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very
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little
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idea
of that particular
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place
everything seems new to you and most
probably
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people
may speak
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different
languages their accent may differ their foods, water, clothing, hair styles, gait almost everything that you are not familiar with may differ.
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Hence
it is much better to adapt yourself
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according
to the
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place
where you have
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moved
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because
it will
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help
you to acclimatization your body
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according
to the environment in which you
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have to
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live
. For
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myself have faced such situations when I had to
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move
to the Northern areas of Pakistan as they are
extremely
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cold
and there the temperature is quite low
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so
that you can’t even
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think
of living in such conditions unless you have
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some
proper arrangements of any heating systems like an electric heater
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but
unfortunately there was no electricity in that area
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so
there natives have ways to survive in that
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cold
of snow by burning woods which they
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used
to
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cut
from the high mountains and these woods were their prime source of survival and in food they
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used
to eat meat a lot and drink tea and coffee
specially
at night
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before
going to sleep. There the paths and road are always steep
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so
you
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have to
be
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very
careful whenever you are on the roads unfortunately if you slip then there is a
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risk
of losing your life
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because
deep down there is a deadly slope.
Therefore
, in my opinion if you want to survive in any
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different
culture then you
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must
follow their natives which will
eventually
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help
you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
there with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
and safety.

IELTS essay Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs.

Essay
  American English
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324 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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