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Some people think that urban spaces should be used for parks rather than for housing

Some people think that urban spaces should be used for parks rather than for housing 2rmNM
A number of folks believe urban spaces would have been appropriate if it had been used parks rather than building shelters. This essay agrees parks are far better and greater than houses. It is clear that human population grows significantly and it is vital to find sufficient homes all of them, for this reason I eagerly need to be invested these spaces and be built a lot of houses. On the other hand we need to sustain our life and maintain everything good for our mind and health overall, consequently parks are designed to flow fresh air freely and people enjoy their spare time happily. In spite of making a lot of advantages they have potent impact on lacking them. Put all them together I strongly hold parks are essential for us and we cannot compromise over anything.
A number of folks believe urban spaces would have been appropriate if it had been
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used
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parks
rather
than building shelters. This essay
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agrees
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parks
are far better and greater than
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houses
. It is
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clear
that human population grows
significantly
and it is vital to find sufficient homes all of them,
for this reason
I
eagerly
need to
be invested
these spaces and
be built
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a lot of
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houses
.
On the other hand
we need to sustain our life and maintain everything
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good
for our mind and health
overall
,
consequently
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parks
are designed
to flow fresh air
freely
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
enjoy their spare time
happily
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
In spite of
making
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
advantages they have potent impact on lacking them. Put all them together I
strongly
hold
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parks
are essential for
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
us and
we cannot compromise over anything.
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IELTS essay Some people think that urban spaces should be used for parks rather than for housing

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
138 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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