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Some people think that to improve road safety legal minimum age should be increased to what extent do you agree or disagree

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There is no doubt that road accidents are elevating. It is a hot debatable issue in current time. Few individuals opine that to abate accident case legal minimum age for driving should be increased. However I disagree with this statement to large extent. This essay will deal with supportive reason why I opposed this notion. To begin with, the preponderant reason individuals have to to rely on public transport to commute to their work and places. To elaborate it, instead of elevating legal minimum age denizens should provided proper knowledge about handling vehicles in different circumstances to avoid fatal accident. Moreover, due to late timing of public transport masses will suffer. In addition, students study independently of their parents travel on motorbikes to there colleges but with increase in minimum legal age we have to upon the parents. Is quite time-consuming. Probing further, introduction of this policy not only affect into it chilli but also economically. Owing to increase in legal age manufacturing and retailer company will suffer due to their lesd sales of cars and motorbikes. For economic growth will dwindeled. Despite this public authorities should inaugurated communities in every City to impart knowledge about driving to reduce accident. To conclude it's not only a effect the lifestyle of human beings but also economic growth of nation. Although it will reduced accident case to some extent but message should be opted in its place.
There is no doubt that road
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accidents
are elevating. It is a hot debatable issue in
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current
time. Few individuals opine that to abate
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accident
case
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legal
minimum
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age
for driving should
be increased
.
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However
I disagree with this statement to large extent. This essay will deal with supportive reason why I opposed this notion.

To
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begin
with, the preponderant reason individuals have
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rely on public transport to commute to their work and places. To elaborate it,
instead
of elevating
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legal
minimum
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age
denizens should
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provided
proper knowledge about handling vehicles in
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different
circumstances to avoid fatal
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accident
.
Moreover
, due to late timing of public transport masses will suffer.
In addition
, students study
independently
of their parents travel on motorbikes to
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there
colleges
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but
with increase in minimum
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legal
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age
we
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have to
upon the parents. Is quite time-consuming.

Probing
further
, introduction of this policy not
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chilli
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but
also
economically
. Owing to increase in
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legal
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manufacturing and retailer
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company
will suffer due to their
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lesd
sales of cars and motorbikes. For economic growth will
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dwindeled
. Despite this public authorities should
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inaugurated
communities in every City to impart knowledge about driving to
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reduce
accident.

To conclude
it's not
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only
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a
effect the lifestyle of human beings
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but
also
economic growth of nation. Although it will
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reduced
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accident
case to
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some
extent
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but
message should
be opted
in its place.
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IELTS essay Some people think that to improve road safety legal minimum age should be increased

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
235 words
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5.0
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