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Some people think that they should not pay the tax that support the state education system if their children study at private school. To what extents do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that they should not pay the tax that support the state education system if their children study at private school. MoXPN
In this day and age, tertiary study institutions, in most countries, are substantially maintained by government for constant pupil’s edification while private schools appear with a prohibitively exorbitant pay as a result of the maintenance of special organizations. Indeed, it is widely thought that families whose offspring’s learning at the non-governmental school should be exempted from paying tax that reinforces the education system. However, I personally dissent with this assumption because of some reasons. Before all else, I staunchly assume that tax disbursement is of paramount importance in maintaining the same responsibility among all society. It can’t be denied that if non-public pupil’s parents do not provide this type of extra expense to the national education system and see it as a gratuitous factor, the onus will be on government-school students to more terrifically contribute their own money with the aim of fulfilling the requirements. And unquestionably, this matter will put many financial pressure on their parents especially the destitute ones. Another analysis, when it comes to social rationalization, children is not fully forced to be sent to private school by the government. In fact, people send their children to non-governmental school, they willingly accept higher fee thanks to their affluence. If they do not support state education, the government might find it tough to manage the state-supported education system. I reckon refusing to pay tax for educational system will be an egregious practice for the whole development of our nation. It is necessary that we should be prepared to pay our share of money that fosters public education well-being. According to statistics, it is a good point for all members of the society to have high quality education condition with equal opportunities. This will result in a well-educated workforce and in turn a more productive and prosperous nation. For instance, a well-funded education system can shape employees with qualified and competent aptitudes that has been always part of the society advancement. In general, I do not agree that financial concession should be made for people who choose non-public school/ Overall, I do not believe that people should not be in charge of tax payment when studying at private school.
In this day and age, tertiary study institutions, in most countries, are
substantially
maintained by
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government
for constant pupil’s edification while private
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schools
appear with a
prohibitively
exorbitant pay
as a result
of the maintenance of special organizations.
Indeed
, it is
widely
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thought
that families whose offspring’s learning at the non-governmental
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school
should
be exempted
from paying
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tax
that reinforces the
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education
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system
.
However
, I
personally
dissent with this assumption
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because
of
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some
reasons.

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Before
all else, I
staunchly
assume that
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tax
disbursement is of paramount importance in maintaining the same responsibility among all society. It can’t
be denied
that if non-public pupil’s parents do not provide this type of extra expense to the national
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education
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
system
and
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see
it as a gratuitous factor, the onus will be on
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government
-school students to more
terrifically
contribute their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
money with the aim of fulfilling the requirements. And
unquestionably
, this matter will put
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
financial pressure on their parents
especially
the destitute ones.

Another analysis, when it
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comes
to social rationalization, children is not
fully
forced to be
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sent
to private
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school
by the
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government
. In fact,
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people
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send
their children to non-governmental
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school
, they
willingly
accept higher fee thanks to their affluence. If they do not support state
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
might find it tough to manage the state-supported
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
system
. I reckon refusing to pay
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
for educational
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
system
will be an egregious practice for the whole development of our nation.

It is necessary that we should
be prepared
to pay our share of money that fosters public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
well-being. According to statistics, it is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
point for all members of the society to have high quality
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
condition with equal opportunities. This will result in a well-educated workforce and in turn a more productive and prosperous nation.
For instance
, a well-funded
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
system
can shape employees with qualified and competent aptitudes that has been always part of the society advancement.

In general
, I do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that financial concession should
be made
for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who choose non-public school/
Overall
, I do not believe that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should not be in charge of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
payment when studying at private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that they should not pay the tax that support the state education system if their children study at private school.

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