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Some people think that there should be the death penalty for extremely serious crime. Others believe that it is not normally correct to kill criminals. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people think that there should be the death penalty for extremely serious crime. Others believe that it is not normally correct to kill criminals. with this statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. OgxYk
In recent years, the rate of crimes has increased dramatically worrisome in the passage of time. People appeal that the leading authority has to act as a deterrent must have a measure in order to crackdown against the number of lawbreakers. And one of the punishments that people proposed is the death penalty. The following point of view that capital punishment does not always lead to fewer crimes in society will be analyzed meticulously in this essay. Why? The reasons are capital punishment can deter criminals; To begin with, it is undeniable that capital punishment is extremely important to deter criminals who have committed serious crimes such as murder, drug trafficking and so on cannot be tolerated. Take Pakistan for an example, the leading state of Pakistan has controlled the level of terrorism by enforcing death penalties for the members of terrorist organizations. Therefore, the crime rate is likely to fall effectively if governments take strong measures to be tough on crime. Nevertheless, capital punishment is considered unsuitable punishment for several reasons. Some people argue that they have no right to kill other humans because the authority to live is the basic right of any human being, and no one can infringe this right. Moreover, innocent people can face wrongful punishment that leads to serious mistakes. Such unfair results take away the lives of innocent people and make other citizens lose their faith in law and justice. In my opinion, it is not necessary for the government to imposes the death penalty for lawbreakers. The leading authority can vary policies by giving criminals a chance of rehabilitation, ex-offenders can be reformed and become law-abiding and productive members of society. Furthermore, I believe that people should have the opportunity to make a fresh start after they are released from prison. As a whole view, everyone in this world has equal rights to live and being life, hence the state should try other punishments such as fines, probation orders, or community service orders, instead of enforcing the death penalty for crimes.
In recent years, the rate of
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crimes
has increased
dramatically
worrisome in the passage of time.
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People
appeal that the leading authority
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has to
act as a deterrent
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must
have a measure in order to crackdown against the number of lawbreakers. And one of the
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punishments
that
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people
proposed is the death
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penalty
. The following point of view that
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capital
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punishment
does not always lead to fewer
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crimes
in society will
be analyzed
meticulously
in this essay. Why? The reasons are
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capital
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punishment
can deter criminals;

To
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begin
with, it is undeniable that
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capital
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punishment
is
extremely
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important
to deter criminals who have committed serious
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crimes
such as murder, drug trafficking and
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so
on cannot
be tolerated
. Take Pakistan for an example, the leading state of Pakistan has controlled the level of terrorism by enforcing death
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penalties
for the members of terrorist organizations.
Therefore
, the
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crime
rate is likely to fall
effectively
if
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governments
take strong measures to be tough on crime.

Nevertheless
,
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capital
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punishment
is considered
unsuitable
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punishment
for several reasons.
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Some
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people
argue that they have no
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right
to kill other humans
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because
the authority to
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live
is the basic
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right
of any human being, and no one can infringe this
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right
.
Moreover
, innocent
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people
can face wrongful
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punishment
that leads to serious mistakes. Such unfair results take away the
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lives
of innocent
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people
and
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make
other citizens lose their faith in law and justice.

In my opinion, it is not necessary for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to imposes the death
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penalty
for lawbreakers. The leading authority can vary policies by giving criminals a chance of rehabilitation, ex-offenders can
be reformed
and become law-abiding and productive members of society.
Furthermore
, I believe that
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people
should have the opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a fresh
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start
after they
are released
from prison.

As a whole view, everyone in this world has equal
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rights
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
and being life,
hence
the state should try other
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punishments
such as fines, probation orders, or community service orders,
instead
of enforcing the death
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penalty
for
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crimes
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that there should be the death penalty for extremely serious crime. Others believe that it is not normally correct to kill criminals. with this statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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