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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words.

: Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. 0PYQ
In general, teenage years and adulthood tend to have their own place in human life however few people enjoy their teenage years the most. In my opinion both have its equal importance in a human life in terms of happiness. In the following essay I will be discussing both views separately. First of all, adolescent is the stage in a man's life where it gives a sense of freedom without any worries aside but as the life moves ahead it has its equal responsibility in all terms. For example a child enjoys every moment making new companions and mostly has not got any goal in life whatsoever so they enjoy it the most. Secondly, as for few people adulthood is far better for them in terms of their teenage years is that their aspirations deviate as now they become financially independent and also have their decision making power. For instance few people think that being a teenager they had too much pressure in their studies which in adulthood brings them a sense of fulfillment. To conclude every man is unique of its kind and it's the choice of themselves to decide whatsoever their more cherishable times in life are.
In general
, teenage years and adulthood tend to have their
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own
place in human
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life
however
few
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people
enjoy their teenage years the most. In my opinion both have its equal importance in a human
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life
in terms of happiness.
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In
the following essay I will be discussing both views
separately
.

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First of all
, adolescent is the stage in a
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man
's
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life
where it gives a sense of freedom without any worries aside
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but
as the
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life
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moves
ahead it has its equal responsibility in all terms.
For example
a child enjoys every moment making new companions and
mostly
has not
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got
any goal in
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life
whatsoever
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so
they enjoy it the most.

Secondly
, as for few
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people
adulthood is far better for them in terms of their teenage years is that their aspirations deviate as
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now
they become
financially
independent and
also
have their
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decision making
power.
For instance
few
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people
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think
that being a
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teenager
they had too much pressure in their studies which in adulthood brings them a sense of fulfillment.

To conclude
every
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man
is unique of its kind and it's the choice of themselves to decide whatsoever their more
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cherishable
times in
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life
are.

IELTS essay : Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
199 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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