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Some people think that the government should give more money to creative people, such as artists and musicians. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that creative people like musicians and artists should receive financial support from the government. This essay agrees that more money should be given to talented people. Firstly, creative individuals are being paid less than what they deserve and secondly, it would help to preserve the cultural heritage of the country. It is often seen that talented individuals like musicians and artists are being paid very poorly, in contrast to the hard work put by creators
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is argued
that creative
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people
like musicians and artists should receive financial support from the
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government
. This essay
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agrees
that more money should be
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given
to talented
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people
.
Firstly
, creative individuals are
being paid
less than what they deserve and
secondly
, it would
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help
to preserve the cultural heritage of the country.

It is
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often
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seen
that talented individuals like musicians and artists are
being paid
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very
poorly
,
in contrast
to the
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hard
work put by creators

IELTS essay Some people think that the government should give more money to creative people, such as artists and musicians.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
77 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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