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First of all, people these days are so busy working because a group of people have hectic lifestyles.

First of all, people these days are so busy working because a group of people have hectic lifestyles. For example, they must earn money to pay their monthly expenses such as utility bills or rent, which means they have to spend an abundance of time to work and some may have ambitions to achieve such as promotion. This is because they cannot afford to go to a gym for workout after work. Furthermore, when they are off from work, they still feel exhausted and do not have enough energy left to move body. Eventually, that most people become a couch potato while doing preferring sedentary activities at home such as playing video games or watching TV. Thus, these circumstances may lead them not only to suffer from diseases such as diabetes, but also to decrease the level of health due to lack of exercise. In conclusion, some believe that.

Often, this adverbial phrase is redundant. Consider using “first”.First
First of all
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 these days are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 busy working This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 a group of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 have hectic lifestyles. For example
, they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
 earn money to pay their monthly expenses such as utility bills or rent, which means they This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 spend an abundance of time to work and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 may have ambitions to achieve such as promotion. This is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 they cannot afford to go to a gym for workout after work. Furthermore
, when they are off from work, they still
 feel exhausted and do not have This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
enough
 energy This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departed
left
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocate
move
 body. Eventually
, that most This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 become a couch potato while doing preferring sedentary activities at home such as playing video games or watching TV. Thus
, these circumstances may lead them not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 to suffer from diseases such as diabetes, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
 to decrease the level of health due to lack of exercise.

In conclusion
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 believe that. 