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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts pJ2da
If the government take money out from the arts in that country, I think several art’s student and teacher probably be angry and be lost the whole inspiration of their career. It’s unnecessary to decease fund if the government manage this equally. The arts of education have important as much as another department. Beautiful places or great architecture were properly built form creative arts, The country which have nice architecture always supports all student and university and their government actually head for developing it as well. In addition, lots of scholarship that were distributed from government college are easier to ask for it. Even though you didn’t have numerous moneys for master degree, you can get some attractive things by require for further fund in order to reaching for your future. In other hand a lot of country which didn’t have any supporting for this, it becomes without valuable place and cultures. As a result, many travelers aren’t interested there. Moreover, The national income will disappear likewise inattention about it. And many people might lost the main income on this awful choice of their government. This is the reason why the government shouldn’t reduce importance of the arts. Not only that but all of education should be supported by them and then everyone must know the better choice of increasing efficient our economic you can participate into museum around your home and present what beautiful thing your country has. And I agree highly it isn’t wasting money on it absolutely.
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manage this
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important
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built form creative
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country
which have

nice architecture always supports all student and university and their
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developing
it
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, lots of scholarship that
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from
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college


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are
easier to
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some
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reaching
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which didn’t have any supporting for this, it becomes without valuable

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place
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travelers aren’t interested there.
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will
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might lost the main income on this awful choice of their
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government
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This is the reason why the
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government
shouldn’t
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reduce
importance of the
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arts
. Not
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that
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all


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of
education should
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by them and then everyone
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must
know the better choice of increasing efficient our economic you can participate into museum around your home and present what
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beautiful
thing your
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IELTS essay Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts

Essay
  American English
11 paragraphs
250 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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