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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere. qVaxa
Currently, the government spends part of their budget not only on Arts but on other aspects of governance. I partly agree to the assertion by a number of people that money spent on Arts is a waste. The importance of funding the arts and other sectors will be analyzed in this essay. It is essential that the government spends a significant amount of its budget on other aspects like the hospitals, roads, schools and electricity than in the arts because they determine the quality of life people will live. Taking Nigeria as an example, the percentage of the National budget for health and education is usually below 10 percent of the total which has resulted in poor health infrastructure and services, with fewer teachers, and this may eventually lead to a decline in the health of the nation with poor educational standards. This, it is apparent that ensuring the government spends more money on other services is essential. However, this does not mean that money spent by the government on arts is a waste, because it has an important impact on out quality of life as many people derive great pleasure in going to music festivals and cinemas. This has helped to keep our culture alive for future generations. This shows that the arts should not be neglected. To conclude, I do not believe spending money on arts is a waste. A balance should be struck to ensure the arts and other services are maintained and made available to all.
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Arts
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aspects of governance. I partly
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agree
to the assertion by a number of
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people
that
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money
spent on
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Arts
is a waste. The importance of funding the
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arts
and
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other
sectors will
be analyzed
in this essay.

It is essential that the
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government
spends a significant amount of its budget on
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other
aspects like the hospitals, roads, schools and electricity than in the
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arts
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because
they determine the quality of life
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people
will
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live
. Taking Nigeria as an example, the percentage of the National budget for health and education is
usually
below 10 percent of the total which has resulted in poor health infrastructure and services, with fewer teachers, and this may
eventually
lead to a decline in the health of the nation with poor educational standards. This, it is apparent that ensuring the
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government
spends more
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money
on
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other
services is essential.

However
, this does not mean that
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money
spent by the
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government
on
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arts
is a waste,
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because
it has an
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important
impact on out quality of life as
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many
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people
derive great pleasure in going to music festivals and cinemas. This has
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helped
to
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keep
our culture alive for future generations. This
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shows
that the
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arts
should not
be neglected
.

To conclude
, I do not believe spending
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money
on
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arts
is a waste. A balance should
be struck
to ensure the
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arts
and
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other
services
are maintained
and made available to all.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent elsewhere.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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