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Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. pl2w
Whether art and artists should receive government funding has always been a topic of discussion. Some people opine that instead of wasting money on arts, the government should allocate its funds for the betterment of other sectors. I cannot agree with this opinion. In my opinion art is as important as any other sector and should receive government support. There are several reasons why the government should spend money on arts. One of the predominant reasons is that art reflects the culture of a country and promotes people’s understanding of their culture and architecture. Secondly, people from outside the country come to see the historical buildings and by maintaining its artistic legacy, a country can encourage tourists to visit again and again. This practice boosts the tourism sector and eventually the economic growth of a country. Thirdly, the art sector employs many people. For example, artists like singers and dancers have huge fan following. Their shows are watched by thousands of people. Such events provide employment to hundreds of people. Without government funding many art forms will die down and that will be a huge loss for the country. However, spending on arts should not be at the expense of other sectors like education, healthcare or defense. Those are certainly more important and hence should receive more funding. It is just that art should not be neglected. To conclude, I believe that the government should distribute its funds evenly to all sectors including arts because every sector has its own contribution towards the development of a country.
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and artists should receive
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funding has always been a topic of discussion.
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opine that
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, the
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should allocate its funds for the betterment of other
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. I cannot
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agree
with this opinion. In my opinion
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is as
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important
as any other
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sector
and should receive
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support.

There are several reasons why the
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government
should spend money on
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arts
. One of the predominant reasons is that
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art
reflects the culture of a
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country
and promotes
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people’s
understanding of their culture and architecture.
Secondly
,
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people
from outside the
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country
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come
to
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see
the historical buildings and by maintaining its artistic legacy, a
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country
can encourage tourists to visit again and again. This practice boosts the tourism
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sector
and
eventually
the economic growth of a
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country
.
Thirdly
, the
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art
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sector
employs
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many
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.
For example
, artists like singers and dancers have huge fan following. Their
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shows
are
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watched
by thousands of
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people
. Such
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events
provide employment to hundreds of
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people
. Without
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government
funding
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many
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forms will
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die
down and that will be a huge loss for the
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country
.
However
, spending on
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arts
should not be at the expense of other
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sectors
like education, healthcare or defense. Those are
certainly
more
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important
and
hence
should receive more funding. It is
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that
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art
should not
be neglected
.
To conclude
, I believe that the
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government
should distribute its funds
evenly
to all
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sectors
including
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arts
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because
every
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sector
has its
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own
contribution towards the development of a
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country
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere.

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