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Some people think that the goverment should provide funding on elders homes.Others believe thatmoney should be spend by families. Give your opinion .

Some people think that the goverment should provide funding on elders homes. Others believe thatmoney should be spend by families. Give your opinion. Qwbjw
Public concern has arisen about whether the government should fund or family should fund for Elders' homes. I tend to believe that the government should allocate more financial resources to serve elders. Homes for the elders surely require more government funding for the following reasons. The primary reason we have to take into consideration is that, elders were the people who supported to raise the economy of the government in the past. Actually it is what a government can do to give tribute to the elders. Apart from that elders homes are needed by most elders. Even some of them have their own pension but most are not. So it is a must to cater the whole elders without any differences. A third reason for my belief is that government payments for adults care adhere with the culture. Any nation represents good thoughts to its society, the youngsters gets positive impressions. I admit that family contributions to elders stays help to improve it's facilities. Despite that all the families are not wealth enough for funding. In conclusion, i would argue that tertiary education should be paid by the government. It would be more important if the government can spend in an more beneficial way to make the elders' late life more conconveniently and happily.
Public concern has arisen about whether the
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government
should fund or family should fund for Elders' homes.

I tend to believe that the
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government
should allocate more financial resources to serve elders.

Homes for the
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elders
surely
require more
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government
funding for the following reasons. The primary reason we
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have to
take into consideration is that,
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elders
were the
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people
who supported to raise the economy of the
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government
in the past. Actually it is what a
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government
can do to give tribute to the elders.

Apart from that
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elders
homes
are needed
by most
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elders
. Even
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some
of them have their
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own
pension
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but
most are not.
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So
it is a
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must to
cater the whole
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elders
without any differences.

A third reason for my belief is that
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government
payments for adults care adhere with the culture. Any nation represents
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good
thoughts to its society, the youngsters
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gets
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positive
impressions.

I admit that family contributions to
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elders
stays
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help
to
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improve
it's facilities. Despite that all the families are not wealth
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enough
for funding.

In conclusion
,
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i
would argue that tertiary education should
be paid
by the
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government
. It would be more
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important
if the
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government
can spend in
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an
more beneficial way to
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make
the elders' late life more
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conconveniently
and
happily
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the goverment should provide funding on elders homes. Others believe thatmoney should be spend by families. Give your opinion.

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