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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. DJmE
Recently one of my friend was attacked in the middle of downtown by a group of young boys and, he had to surrender and give away all of his belongings to save his life. When he told me about this incident, it made me think more about overall crime scene in our society. There are different solutions proposed from all levels of society to contain crime. This essay will compare two viewpoints, one is increasing prison sentences to curb criminal activities and other alternatives which have more impact to achieve minimal crime rate. In current legal system, each crime has a defined punishment and overall duration of sentences varies as per the intensity of the crime. Criminals get by easily for smaller crimes and, they become free very soon to loot next innocent victim. This cycle keeps repeating and some of the goons use it to their advantage and become fearless because of shorter duration of punishment. It might help to revisit existing laws and revise punishments for smaller crimes too, so that even looters will also think twice before daring to think about doing something similar again. On the other hand, there are thoughts around making prison sentences more efficient to help rehabilitate criminals faster. Introducing life changing programs, meditation and making people learn a new skill might help them to make them employable in outside world. Another aspect is increasing police force and deploying more cops on duty might also help to keep criminals in control. In conclusion, I suggest all these options should be married together to come up with a stronger system to enforce law in day-to-day life to establish harmony for all levels of society.
Recently one of my friend
was attacked
in the middle of downtown by a group of young boys and, he had to surrender and give away all of his belongings to save his life. When he
told
me about this incident, it made me
think
more about
overall
crime
scene in our society. There are
different
solutions proposed from all levels of society to contain
crime
. This essay will compare two viewpoints, one is increasing prison sentences to curb
criminal
activities and other alternatives which have more impact to achieve minimal
crime
rate.

In
current
legal system, each
crime
has a defined punishment and
overall
duration of sentences varies as per the intensity of the
crime
.
Criminals
get
by
easily
for smaller
crimes
and, they become free
very
soon
to loot
next
innocent victim. This cycle
keeps
repeating and
some of the
goons
use
it to their advantage and become fearless
because
of shorter duration of punishment. It might
help
to revisit existing laws and revise punishments for smaller
crimes
too,
so
that even looters will
also
think
twice
before
daring to
think
about doing something similar again.

On the other hand
, there are thoughts around making prison sentences more efficient to
help
rehabilitate
criminals
faster. Introducing life changing programs, meditation and making
people
learn a new
skill
might
help
them to
make
them employable in outside world. Another aspect is increasing police force and deploying more cops on duty might
also
help
to
keep
criminals
in control.

In conclusion
, I suggest all these options should
be married
together to
come
up with a stronger system to enforce law in day-to-day life to establish harmony for all levels of society.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.0
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