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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to apply longer prison sentences; other people think that there are better ways to reduce crime rates.

Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to apply longer prison sentences; other people think that there are better ways to reduce crime rates. KwVLL
Felons are increasing tremendously in the world and people have different views to overcome the ratio of crimes. Some people opine that the best way to reduce the crime rate is to increase the punishment while on the flip side people argues there are some other aspect of the reduction of crimes. I partially agree with this view to increase the tenure of a sentence, I believe other ways are better. On the one side of the arguments people say offender should sentencing for long term, it will help to reduce the crimes. Fixed tortures such as the death penalty and life imprisonment for drug trafficking deter an offender to do such heinous crimes. Ruthlessness of such harsh tortures will be beneficial for society and reduced the alarming rate of crimes. The international report of criminal investigation shows Saudi Arabia is consistently top award in a low index of crimes due to its aggressive law enforced by designated crimes. Nevertheless the purpose of this law is to keep safe, innocent people, but it violates human rights. However there are some other aspects that will help to reduce the crimes. Firstly prisoners should be taught the professional skills so they can get jobs and spend their remaining life peacefully. Secondly when an offender released from jail after completing their tenure in jail their activities should be monitored, this will help to overcome the rates of crime. To conclude, as crimes are increasingly long term suffering are not valid as it violate human rights. The other aspects are better to reduce the crime rates.
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tremendously
in the world and
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people
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crimes
.
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Some
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people
opine that the best way to
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reduce
the
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crime
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rate
is to increase the punishment while on the flip side
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people
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argues
there are
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some
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other
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aspect
of the reduction of
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crimes
. I
partially
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agree
with this view to increase the tenure of a sentence, I believe
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other
ways are better.

On the one side of the arguments
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people
say offender should
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sentencing
for long term, it will
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help
to
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reduce
the
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crimes
.
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Fixed
tortures such as the death penalty and life imprisonment for drug trafficking deter an offender to do such heinous
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crimes
. Ruthlessness of such harsh tortures will be beneficial for society and
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reduced
the alarming
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rate
of
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crimes
. The international report of criminal investigation
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shows
Saudi Arabia is
consistently
top award in a low index of
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crimes
due to its aggressive law enforced by designated
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crimes
.
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Nevertheless
the purpose of this law is to
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keep
safe, innocent
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people
,
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but
it violates human rights.

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However
there are
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some
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other
aspects that will
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help
to
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reduce
the
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crimes
.
Firstly
prisoners should
be taught
the professional
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skills
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so
they can
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get
jobs and spend their remaining life
peacefully
.
Secondly
when an offender released from jail after completing their tenure in jail their activities should
be monitored
, this will
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help
to overcome the
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rates
of crime.

To conclude
, as
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crimes
are
increasingly
long term suffering are not valid as it
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violate
human rights. The
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other
aspects are better to
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reduce
the
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crime
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rates
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to apply longer prison sentences; other people think that there are better ways to reduce crime rates.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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