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Some people think that teenagers should follow the example of older people. Others think that it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that teenagers should follow the example of older people. Others think that it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say. WQjb
Even today, there are many people who insist that young people should follow their elders such as their parents and grandparents. However, there are others who feel that youngsters should make their own decisions instead of following others. In my view, youngsters have the right to make their own decisions, but they should be guided by their parents. Young people are more educated than their parents. They are more aware of the latest happenings in the world. They know what is trendy and what is not. However, they lack maturity. They also tend to make rash decisions. For this reason, youngsters should receive the guidance of their parents. If young people do whatever they want without listening to their parents, they are more likely to land themselves in trouble. Having said that, if young people want to make their own decisions and choose a path that is different from that of their parents they should have the freedom to do so. Youngsters these days are better educated and have a decent understanding of the world. They know what they want to do with their life. For example, most young people know what they want to be in life. Likewise, they know which ideology they should believe in and who they want to live with. In my opinion, it is important for young people to make such life decisions. Parents should be there to guide them every step of the way. However, they must not force their children to follow them blindly. In conclusion, there are certainly some benefits to following elders; however, in my opinion, youngsters are intelligent enough to make their own decisions regarding their life and career. It is the responsibility of parents to offer them guidance whenever they need it.
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they should
be guided
by their parents.

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are more educated than their
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parents
. They are more aware of the latest happenings in the world. They
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know
what is trendy and what is not.
However
, they lack maturity. They
also
tend to
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make
rash
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decisions
.
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, youngsters should receive the guidance of their
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parents
. If
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young
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do whatever they
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without listening to their
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parents
, they are more likely to land themselves in trouble.

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they should have the freedom to do
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. Youngsters these days are better educated and have a decent understanding of the world. They
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what they
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to do with their
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, most
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people
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what they
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, they
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which ideology they should believe in and who they
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with. In my opinion, it is
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young
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Parents
should be there to guide them every step of the way.
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, they
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not force their children to follow them
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benefits to following elders;
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to
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their
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decisions
regarding their
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life
and career. It is the responsibility of
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parents
to offer them guidance whenever they need it.
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IELTS essay Some people think that teenagers should follow the example of older people. Others think that it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say.

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