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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely Anow
In some people's mind, it is beneficial to share more and more information related to scientific research, business and academic field. Whereas, others condradict this opinion and believe that it is better to keep some information unknown due to their importance, value and sometimes danger. In this essay, I will discuss both towards of this issue and express my own opinion as it is better to not share all of them freely. Firstly, Today is Information Technology century. Thus, it is natural situation to share information more and easily. Indeed, it is great to share any information with everyone, which entails people to be open-minded. In some places, intelligency rate is problematic among population. This condition can be caused by lack of information or its secret. Less knowledge can not effect sufficiently to the population and weakenes their academic knowledge. Conversely, it is sometimes most proper way to isolate some information from others. Because, this information can be distribution, wrong and even harmful for residents. Some scientific projects are made by financial incentives or long time. Their valuable work is not simple circumstance to be shared freely. Certain aspects of business field are so important for any company to not have their process broken down by robbing business plan. Free exchange of information lead to destroy balance of community. In inference, although, sharing of information can be beneficial in some way for population. Some information related to science may be harmful in some circumstances including production of nuclear weapon. Business-related works are valuable for company.
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's mind, it is beneficial to
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information
related to scientific research, business and academic field. Whereas, others
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condradict
this opinion and believe that it is better to
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unknown due to their importance, value and
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danger
. In this essay, I will discuss both towards of this issue and express my
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opinion as it is better to not
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share
all of them
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Today
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Technology century.
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is natural
situation to
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more and
easily
.
Indeed
, it is great to
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any
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information
with everyone, which entails
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people
to be open-minded. In
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some
places,
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rate is problematic among population. This condition can
be caused
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or its secret. Less knowledge can not
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weakenes
their academic knowledge.

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proper way to isolate
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from others.
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, this
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can be distribution,
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wrong
and even harmful for residents.
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Some
scientific projects
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be shared
freely
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so
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important
for any
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company
to not have their process broken down by robbing business plan. Free exchange of
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information
lead to
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destroy
balance of community.

In inference, although, sharing of
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information
can be beneficial in
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some
way for population.
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Some
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information
related to science may be harmful in
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some
circumstances including production of nuclear weapon. Business-related works are valuable for
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company
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely

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  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
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