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Some people think that technology are not necessary whereas others believe that they are essential for people. To what extent do you agree with this statement.

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Technology is what humans were seeking for from the beginning. From the first light bulb sputtering and glowing to life to a series of 0s and 1s making calls and being able to talk to human beings, we have come a long way. The very purpose of technology, from its birth, was to assist human beings and make their lives better. But some people think that technology is not necessary also others believe that they are essential for people. I will discuss both sides of the argument in details and my opinion in this essay. Everyday our lives get simpler to live as technology relieves us of some of our day to day activities, For example Robots, Self-driving cars, Virtual Reality (VR) Technology, etc. Technology has become an integral part of our daily life and our needs and demands, for it is rising exponentially. It has become one of the primary driving factors in all of society's progress. The society has a cyclical co-dependence on technology. Humans use technology to travel, to communicate, to learn, to do business and to live in comfort. Technology has made our lives easy. It is unimaginable to explore how each new advanced technology has impacted our lives and how it will impact the future. Technology also has impacted the environment, people and the society as a whole. Technology has improved Communication, Transportation, Education & Learning process, Health-Care and many other infrastructure business areas. As Clive James, a famous journalist, by stated” when they go wrong, machines reminds you how powerful they are”. The bright future of technology holds green technology on high grounds, giving us electric cars and solar-powered homes. Technology has infiltrated every aspect of our lives, changing how we work, how we learn and how we shop for example, The Internet and related tools already play critical roles, in areas such as data mapping and visualizations, crowd-sourcing and more. As stated by Bill Gates” The advance of technology based on making it fit in so that you don’t even notice it, so it’s part of everyday life”. Many changes and developments due to changes in technology are visible. In the recent times, debates have been conducted over the misuse and negative impacts of technology but only over teenagers, but should explain that from the continuity of the advance of technology, further activities will be left over to technology to perform. Robots take over so many jobs that humans become overly dependent on it. In that case, we will become mere instruments to the tool we created. Technology impacts the earth as a whole, be it environment or society. Nothing escapes it is grasp. Technology causes Physiological, Psychological and Social issues. On the other hand, the Social issues are lack of skill development. While the Physiological issues are mostly temporary and non-fatal, the Psychological issues result in severe consequences. Staring a screen for a long time can result in 'Computer Vision Syndrome' which includes eye strain, blurred vision and dry eyes. Sitting in a particular posture which puts a strain on the spine can cause neck sprain, back ache and in extreme cases Scoliosis. This e-stress causes emotional trauma, lack of trust and self-doubt. The fact that these disorders have been normalized creates a lack of awareness and attention towards it. These disorders if untreated can increase the severity of it and can prove dangerous after a certain limit. The greatest example of such situations is depression. Depression is a collection of multiple disorders which remain untreated on the right time. The increase in depression in most people is relationship problems. The constant need to check up on people has made individuals detectives who keep a track on the activities of their peers. This causes a sense of distrust and doubt. This in turn gives rise to Anxiety which worsens the situation even more. The Social issues on the other hand are rarely addressed. The lack of physical communication gives rise to a lack of personality growth in individuals. Too little human interaction can cause a lower self-esteem which in turn causes stage fear and social anxiety. Not socializing enough can lead to professional problems. The reason these issues exist is because technology controls us instead of we controlling the technology. In conclusion, being not so actively social in this generation may turn out is very hard to even pass through a single day. But it totally rely on us how we handle it. Technology is something we have created and now we are only letting it dig our own grave. Technology isn't a bane, it has really benefitted and changed lives of thousands of people. Hence let it not turn out to be a demon to us because everything is on us. Hence, now it is on us to decide whether we should control ourselves towards technology or letting it control us. As stated by Christian Louis Lange "Technology is a useful servant but a dangerous master". I believe that technology is a tool that, like a knife, can be useful and practical as well as dangerous and catastrophic. Therefore, it should be used in proper place and correctly applied.
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Technology
is what
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humans
were seeking for from the beginning. From the
first
light bulb sputtering and glowing to life to a series of 0s and 1s making calls and being able to talk to
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human
beings, we have
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come
a long way. The
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very
purpose of
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technology
, from its birth, was to assist
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human
beings and
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make
their
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lives
better.
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some
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people
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think
that
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technology
is not necessary
also
others believe that they are essential for
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people
. I will discuss both sides of the argument in
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details
and my opinion in this essay.

'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
Everyday
our
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lives
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get
simpler to
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live
as
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technology
relieves us of
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some
of our
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day to day
activities,
For example
Robots, Self-driving cars, Virtual Reality (VR)
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Technology
, etc.
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Technology
has
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become
an integral part of our daily life and our needs and demands, for it is rising
exponentially
. It has
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become
one of the primary driving factors in all of society's progress. The society has a cyclical co-dependence on
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technology
.
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Humans
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use
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technology
to travel, to communicate, to learn, to do business and to
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live
in comfort.
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Technology
has made our
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lives
easy. It is unimaginable to explore how each new advanced
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technology
has impacted our
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lives
and how it will impact the future.
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Technology
also
has impacted the environment,
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people
and the society as a whole.
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Technology
has
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improved
Communication, Transportation, Education & Learning process, Health-Care and
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many
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other
infrastructure business areas. As Clive James, a
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famous
journalist, by stated” when they go
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wrong
, machines reminds you how powerful they are”. The bright future of
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technology
holds green
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technology
on high grounds, giving us electric cars and solar-powered homes.
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Technology
has infiltrated every aspect of our
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lives
, changing how we work, how we learn and how we shop
for example
, The Internet and related tools already play critical roles, in areas such as data mapping and visualizations, crowd-sourcing and more. As stated by Bill Gates” The advance of
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technology
based on making it fit in
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so
that you don’t even notice it,
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so
it’s part of everyday life”.
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Many
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changes
and developments due to
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changes
in
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technology
are visible.

In the recent times, debates have
been conducted
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over
the misuse and
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negative
impacts of
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technology
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but
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only
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teenagers
,
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but
should
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explain
that from the continuity of the advance of
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technology
,
further
activities will be
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left
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over
to
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technology
to perform. Robots take
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over
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so
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many
jobs that
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humans
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become
overly
dependent on it.
In that case
, we will
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become
mere instruments to the tool we created.
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Technology
impacts the earth as a whole, be it environment or society. Nothing escapes it is grasp.
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Technology
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causes
Physiological, Psychological and
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Social
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issues
. On the
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other
hand, the
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Social
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issues
are
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lack
of
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skill
development. While the Physiological
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issues
are
mostly
temporary and non-fatal, the Psychological
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issues
result in severe consequences. Staring a screen for a long time can result in 'Computer Vision Syndrome' which includes eye strain, blurred vision and dry eyes. Sitting in a particular posture which puts a strain on the spine can
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cause
neck sprain, back ache and in extreme cases Scoliosis. This e-
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stress
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causes
emotional trauma,
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lack
of trust and self-doubt. The fact that these disorders have
been normalized
creates a
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lack
of awareness and attention towards it. These disorders if untreated can increase the severity of it and can prove
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dangerous
after a certain limit. The greatest example of such situations is depression. Depression is a collection of multiple disorders which remain untreated on the right time. The increase in depression in most
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people
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is
relationship problems. The constant need to
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check
up on
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people
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has
made individuals detectives who
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keep
a
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track
on the activities of their peers. This
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causes
a sense of distrust and doubt. This in
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turn
gives rise to Anxiety which worsens the situation even more. The
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Social
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issues
on the
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other
hand are rarely addressed. The
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lack
of physical communication gives rise to a
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lack
of personality growth in individuals. Too
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little
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human
interaction can
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cause
a lower self-esteem which in
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turn
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causes
stage fear and
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social
anxiety. Not socializing
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enough
can lead to professional problems. The reason these
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issues
exist is
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because
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technology
controls us
instead
of
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we controlling
the technology.

In conclusion
, being not
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actively
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in this generation may
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out is
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hard
to even pass through a single day.
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it
totally
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rely
on us how we handle it.
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now
we are
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only
letting it dig our
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grave.
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isn't a bane, it has
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benefitted
and
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of thousands of
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.
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out to be a demon to us
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everything is on us.
Hence
,
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now
it is on us to decide whether we should control ourselves towards
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or letting it control us. As stated by Christian Louis
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Lange
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Technology is a useful servant
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but
a
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dangerous
master
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. I believe that
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technology
is a tool that, like a knife, can be useful and practical
as well
as
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dangerous
and catastrophic.
Therefore
, it should be
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used
in proper place and
correctly
applied.
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IELTS essay Some people think that technology are not necessary whereas others believe that they are essential for people.

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