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Some people thInk that studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to do so? What will be the impacts on children if they are not taught history? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples f v.1

Some people thInk that studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to do so? What will be the impacts on children if they are not taught history? 1
Globalization has many consequences on almost every factor in the world and languages is one of those. People, these days, are focusing on becoming bi-language. I certainly agree that local languages are impacted and are perishing fast. On the one hand, if we have common language all over the world, it will definitely benefit as people from any corner of the world will be able to communicate effectively with each other. This will reduce the cost over third party translators who were persons in past but nowadays devices. Same platform for communication will make life easier and bring all together. On the other hand, local languages are as important as global. Abundant literature is written which provide ample useful information for day to day life. Folk songs are enjoyable only if they are in their original form. Literature and books not only provide knowledge but also traditions and customs. It allows to persist and preserve the culture of particular tribes. It brings diversity and everyone can take advantage of that. For example, in India, most of the Ayurveda books are written in Sanskrit which has mentioned cure of almost every disease. If nobody knows Sanskrit, that knowledge is of no use, hence it is really important to protect and learn them. Another crucial point is if the person knows multiple languages his or her intelligent quotient is more, so the public should be aware about learning more and more languages. To conclude, I think that globalization is one of the reasons to die local languages and it is really important to preserve and save those to get benefits over the time.
Globalization has
many
consequences on almost every factor in the world and
languages
is one of those.
People
, these days, are focusing on becoming bi-language. I
certainly
agree
that local
languages
are impacted
and are perishing
fast
.

On the one hand, if we have common
language
all over the world, it will definitely benefit as
people
from any corner of the world will be able to communicate
effectively
with each other. This will
reduce
the cost over third party translators who were persons in past
but
nowadays devices. Same platform for communication will
make
life easier and bring all together.

On the other hand
, local
languages
are as
important
as global. Abundant literature
is written
which provide ample useful information for day to day life. Folk songs are enjoyable
only
if they are in their original form. Literature and books not
only
provide knowledge
but
also
traditions and customs. It
allows
to persist
and preserve the culture of particular tribes. It brings diversity and everyone can take advantage of that.
For example
, in India, most of the Ayurveda books
are written
in Sanskrit which has mentioned cure of almost every disease. If nobody knows Sanskrit, that knowledge is of no
use
,
hence
it is
really
important
to protect and learn them. Another crucial point is if the person knows multiple
languages
his or her
intelligent quotient is more,
so
the public should be aware about learning more and more languages.

To conclude
, I
think
that globalization is one of the reasons to
die
local
languages
and it is
really
important
to preserve and save those to
get
benefits over the time.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people thInk that studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to do so? What will be the impacts on children if they are not taught history? 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.5
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