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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion 337X
It is true that car accidents have been a problem for a long time, strict punishments have been suggested as a solution to reduce them. There are people who believe that other measures should be taken, in improving road safety. Personally, I think that a combination between them would fix this issue. On the one hand, giving drivers severe penalization is a solution for those who don’t drive prudently because they won’t voluntarily follow the road rules. It will be able to change not only the drive offence’s behaviour, but the other chauffeurs. Heavy penalty should be applied to those who defy the road laws. For example, drivers who exceed the speed limit, must have been imposed a heavier penalty. By paying a greater amount, they will think twice next time. On the other hand, other measures have to be required because fines can become monotonous for some people. After a long time, people may start again to ignore the rules, thus strict punishments would not be so effective anymore. I think that bridges in intersections would decrease number of road accidents. What can be also done is introducing more speed cameras which will make the drivers to pay more attention to the road and the speed limit. To conclude, following the above, strict punishments are not the key to improve road safety. I believe that there are also other measures that should be applied, of course that fines can remain, but not as a key to this situation. There are more important methods that should be thought and applied.
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been suggested
as a solution to
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reduce
them. There are
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people
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who
believe that
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other
measures should
be taken
, in improving
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road
safety.
Personally
, I
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think
that a combination between them would
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fix
this issue.

On the one hand, giving drivers severe penalization is a solution for those
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who
don’t drive
prudently
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because
they won’t
voluntarily
follow the
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road
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rules
. It will be able to
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change
not
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only
the drive
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offence
’s
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behaviour
,
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but
the
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other
chauffeurs. Heavy penalty should
be applied
to those
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who
defy the
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road
laws.
For example
, drivers
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who
exceed the speed limit,
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must
have
been imposed
a heavier penalty. By paying a greater amount, they will
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think
twice
next
time.

On the
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other
hand,
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other
measures
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have to
be required
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because
fines can become monotonous for
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some
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people
. After a long time,
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people
may
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start
again to
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ignore
the
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rules
,
thus
strict punishments would not be
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so
effective anymore. I
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think
that bridges in intersections would decrease number of
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road
accidents. What can be
also
done is introducing more speed cameras which will
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make
the drivers to pay more attention to the
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road
and the speed limit.

To conclude
, following the above, strict punishments are not the key to
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improve
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road
safety. I believe that there are
also
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other
measures that should
be applied
,
of course
that fines can remain,
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but
not as a key to this situation. There are more
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important
methods that should be
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thought
and applied.
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IELTS essay Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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