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some people think that spending a lot on marriage ceremonies is just a waste of money. Others, however , think that such a huge expenditure is necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

some people think that spending a lot on marriage ceremonies is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that such a huge expenditure is necessary for individuals and the society. 5k8wV
In this modern era, individuals earn money for a better lifestyle. Nowadays, are trend of spending large amount of money is being the seemed in the societies. It is reckoned by some people that making large expenses on the marriage ceremonies isjust a waste of a capital while other opine that such a huge expenditure is mandatory for people and the society. Prior to my opinion, both views will be discussed. to commence with the comma in the marriage ceremonies were lots of money is a wasted for celebrating few moments because most of families prefer to organise thse type of functions in excellent way. various type of foods and cousins are added in catering. Even gifts are bought for guests which add extra expenses to a family. These type of expenditures put a load on the shoulders of middle class person. They have to take the loans and debts for arranging affective marriage functions. To exemplify, In India lots of sucidial cases were seen in which subjects are failed to remit the loans that they took for preparation of a marriage ceremonies. This is happening because some people are being influenced by the high income group because they usually prefer to celebrate wedding function in a luxury style, so the middle class people also copy their styles. At that time they make a huge mistake. On other aspect, it is a necessary to spend capital on marriages because these type of new relatives and friends. Even, it is a chance to a family to meet their close guests. As a result, people spend money for the sake of relationships and marriage organisers serve excellent hospitality for the pleasure of others. Moreover, it is aspect of societal pressure. Even, some of expectations are linked with the celebrations, owing to this people really want to make this moment more memorable so they spent more and more. Therefore excess of expenditure on marriages is utmost significant. To sum up, after analysing both aspects are believe that other people are obliged to spent currency on marriage. Yet, it is a Wastage of a money and resources
In this modern era, individuals earn
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money
for a better lifestyle. Nowadays, are trend of spending large amount of
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money
is being the seemed in the societies. It
is reckoned
by
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some
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people
that making large expenses on the
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marriage
ceremonies
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isjust
a waste of a capital while
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other
opine that such a huge expenditure is mandatory for
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people
and the society. Prior to my opinion, both views will
be discussed
.
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to
commence with the comma in the
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marriage
ceremonies were lots of
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money
is a wasted for celebrating few moments
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because
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most of families
prefer to
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organise
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thse
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type
of functions in excellent way.
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various
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type
of foods and cousins are
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added
in catering. Even gifts are
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bought
for guests which
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add
extra expenses to a family. These
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type
of expenditures put a load on the shoulders of middle
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class
person. They
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have to
take the loans and debts for arranging affective
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marriage
functions. To exemplify, In India lots of
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sucidial
cases were
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seen
in which subjects
are failed
to remit the loans that they took for preparation of a
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marriage
ceremonies. This is happening
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because
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some
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people
are
being influenced
by the high income group
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because
they
usually
prefer to celebrate wedding function
Consider replacing "in a luxury style" with the adverb for "luxury"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a luxury style
,
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so
the middle
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class
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people
also
copy their styles. At that time they
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make
a huge mistake. On
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other
aspect, it is a necessary to spend capital on
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marriages
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because
these
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type
of new relatives and friends. Even, it is a chance to a family to
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meet
their close guests.
As a result
,
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people
spend
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money
for the sake of relationships and
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marriage
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organisers
serve excellent hospitality for the pleasure of others.
Moreover
, it is aspect of societal pressure. Even,
After 'some of', you should use 'the' ("some of the expectations") or simply say "some expectations".
some of expectations
are linked
with the celebrations, owing to this
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people
really
want to
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make
this moment more memorable
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so
they spent more and more.
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Therefore
excess of expenditure on
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marriages
is utmost significant. To sum up, after
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analysing
both aspects are
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believe
that
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other
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people
are obliged
to spent currency on
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marriage
.
Yet
, it is a Wastage of a
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money
and resources
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IELTS essay some people think that spending a lot on marriage ceremonies is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that such a huge expenditure is necessary for individuals and the society.

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