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Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. XLpA
some people enjoying their birthday's and anniversaries with their loved one's while the other people believe as a waste of money. This essay will widely elaborate the views in details and reach to a conclusion. Celebrations are known to be one of the popular activity among the many people lives today. There is a grown number of people are now dealing with the busy life styles so now they were able understand the value of freedom. In my office, me and colleagues are going to the dinner outings near the resturants
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enjoying their birthday's and anniversaries with their
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one's while the other
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people
believe as a waste of money. This essay will
widely
elaborate the views in
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details
and reach to a conclusion. Celebrations
are known
to be one of the popular activity among the
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many
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people
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lives
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today
. There is a grown number of
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people
are
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now
dealing with the busy life styles
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so
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now
they were
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the value of freedom. In my office, me and colleagues are going to the dinner outings near the
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resturants

IELTS essay Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
90 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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