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Some people think that some types of criminals should not go to prison. Instead they should do unpaid work in the community. To what extent do you agree?

Owing to the great variety of crimes that can be punishable by prison, some people argue that not all criminals are the same and it would therefore be more appropriate to give certain criminals community service instead. I agree that in some cases, prison may not be the best solution and community service would probably have more benefits. One justification given for prisons is to keep society safe by removing criminals from the outside world. So the first thing to consider is if someone who has broken the law is a danger to other people. In the case of violent crime, there is an argument to keep the perpetrator away from society. However, burglary or possession of drugs, for example, does not involve violence against other people so the criminal does not present a direct danger to anyone in the community. Keeping these types of criminals in prison is expensive for the taxpayer and does not appear to be an effective punishment as they often commit the same crime again when they come out of prison. Personally, I also believe punishments should reform people so they do not reoffend. A further reason not to put these people in prison is that they may mix with more dangerous and violent criminals, potentially committing a worse crime when they are released. By keeping them in the community, helping others, they not only learn new skills, but they could also develop more empathy and care towards others. If this occurs, society can only benefit. Critics of this more rehabilitative approach to crime believe that justice should be harsh in order to deter people from committing similar crimes and that community service could be less likely to have that effect. However, there is very little evidence to suggest that long prison sentences deter criminals. In conclusion, putting criminals who are not a danger to society in prison is expensive and, in my opinion, ineffective, both as a deterrent and as a form of rehabilitation. Community service for non-violent crimes benefits both society and the offender. That said, it would be useful to have more data to work out whether community service or prison is more likely to stop someone reoffending. I strongly believe that decisions on how best to deal with criminals should be based on evidence of what actually works.
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that can be punishable by
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,
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some
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people
argue that not all
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criminals
are the
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same and
it would
therefore
be more appropriate to give certain
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criminals
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community
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service
instead
. I
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agree
that in
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some
cases,
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prison
may not be the best solution and
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community
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service
would
probably
have more benefits. One justification
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given
for
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prisons
is to
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keep
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society
safe by removing
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criminals
from the outside world.
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the
first
thing to consider is if someone who has broken the law is a
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danger
to
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other
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people
. In the case of violent
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crime
, there is an argument to
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keep
the perpetrator away from
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society
.
However
, burglary or possession of drugs,
for example
, does not involve violence against
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other
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people
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so
the
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criminal
does not present a direct
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danger
to anyone in the
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community
. Keeping these types of
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criminals
in
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prison
is expensive for the taxpayer and does not appear to be an effective punishment as they
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often
commit the same
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crime
again when they
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come
out of
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prison
.
Personally
, I
also
believe punishments should reform
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people
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so
they do not
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reoffend
. A
further
reason not to put these
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people
in
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prison
is that they may mix with more
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dangerous
and violent
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criminals
,
potentially
committing a worse
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crime
when they
are released
. By keeping them in the
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community
, helping others, they not
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only
learn new
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skills
,
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but
they could
also
develop more empathy and care towards others. If this occurs,
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society
can
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only
benefit. Critics of this more rehabilitative approach to
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crime
believe that justice should be harsh in order to deter
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people
from committing similar
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crimes
and that
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community
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service
could be less likely to have that effect.
However
, there is
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very
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little
evidence to suggest that long
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sentences deter criminals.

In conclusion
, putting
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criminals
who are not a
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danger
to
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society
in
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prison
is expensive and, in my opinion, ineffective, both as a deterrent and as a form of rehabilitation.
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Community
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service
for non-violent
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crimes
benefits both
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society
and the offender. That said, it would be useful to have more data to work out whether
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community
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service
or
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prison
is more likely to
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stop
someone
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reoffending
. I
strongly
believe that decisions on how best to deal with
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criminals
should
be based
on evidence of what actually works.
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IELTS essay Some people think that some types of criminals should not go to prison. Instead they should do unpaid work in the community.

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