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some people think that secondary school students should academic subjects ( such as history and physics ) while others believe they should study practical subjects ( such as car machinery and cookery ). discuss both views and give your own opinion.

some people think that secondary school students should academic subjects ( such as history and physics ) while others believe they should study practical subjects ( such as car machinery and cookery ). Pg5Aw
it is an unquestionable fact that the 21st century is an era of modernisation in which, some individuals hold the opinion that, secondary school students should compulsorily learn academic subjects such as history and physics, wheres, some part of people deem that, atudents should study practical contents like car machinery and cookery. Hence, I will discuss both views and also described which side dominant most at the end of the essay. To embark with, by looking at the pivotal reason why an increasing number of folks are choosing to academic subjects for their children. First and foremost is when students study academic subjects that is why they develop a set of skills, which is helpful in real life. Another factor is considered that while learners solving various sorts of questions of subjects such as mathematics and physics as consequence students improve stunning abilities to think logically. Besides, when students solving tricky types of questions in small or big groups, which enhances the student's experience and also confidence level as well as learners make a stronger relationship among peers. on the other hand, there are myriad reasons why oppose think the practical subjects are important. In contemporary time, most of the students learn practical subjects, which are assisting develop a plethora of knowledge about the various methods. In addition to this, learners will learn crucially skills and students will use the understanding of the mastery when they will apply their learned knowledge in the necessary situations. In conclusion, I would like to recapitulate that, secondary school give academic or practical awareness and information, thus improve students holistically growth.
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modernisation
in which,
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some
individuals hold the opinion that, secondary school
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students
should
compulsorily
learn
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academic
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subjects
such as history and physics,
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wheres
,
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some
part of
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people
deem that,
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atudents
should study
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practical
contents like car machinery and cookery.
Hence
, I will discuss both views and
also
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described
which side dominant most at the
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end
of the essay.

To embark with, by looking at the pivotal reason why an increasing number of folks are choosing to
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academic
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subjects
for their children.
First
and foremost is when
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students
study
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academic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
that is
why they develop a set of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
, which is helpful in real life. Another factor
is considered
that while learners solving various sorts of questions of
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subjects
such as mathematics and physics as consequence
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students
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improve
stunning abilities to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
logically
.
Besides
, when
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students
solving tricky types of questions in
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small
or
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big
groups, which enhances the student's experience and
also
confidence level
as well
as learners
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make
a stronger relationship among peers.

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on
the other hand, there are myriad reasons why oppose
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think
the
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practical
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subjects
are
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important
. In contemporary time, most of the
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students
learn
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practical
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subjects
, which are assisting develop a plethora of knowledge about the various methods.
In addition
to this, learners will learn
crucially
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skills
and
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students
will
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use
the understanding of the mastery when they will apply their learned knowledge in the necessary situations.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
conclusion, I would like to recapitulate that, secondary school give
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academic
or
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practical
awareness and information,
thus
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improve
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
holistically
growth.
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IELTS essay some people think that secondary school students should academic subjects ( such as history and physics ) while others believe they should study practical subjects ( such as car machinery and cookery ).

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