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Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion. v.11

Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. v. 11
In the salad days of the millennium, the society is polarised into two groups almost equally. Regarding the notion that, whether schools should enrol students as per their academic abilities, while others are against it. However, different people have their distinct mindset. In my opinion, academic institutions should student of various skills and ability. Thus, everyone can experience each others part. The following paragraphs would shed light on both the approaches before making a final note. To commence with the first notion, there are myriad things to share in its favour. Burden and pressure of different subjects will be reduced, correspondingly it will enable students to acquire knowledge without any anxiety, or any ramification. For instance, It has been found in many surveys that students who are pursuing their talent, they are more successful than others. Moreover, every individual has different abilities to perceive and cope with any problem, thereby it is paramount to pay heed on students as per their academic abilities which in turn will facilitate myriad positive things for school as well as for students. Shifting towards the second school of thought, Classification of students may create a negative atmosphere in schools, which is again erroneous for the growth of students, as it may bring feelings of discrimination, but if all students are coming together, then they can learn many valuable things which are essential to be successful such as they can mingle with students of various thoughts, mindset, skills, religions and so on, which students can never acquire from any book. In addition, In this sensible world, it will help students to foster harmony and fraternity thereby beneficial again for their future. Furthermore, various skills from students can create a fruitful fusion in school, which directly or indirectly disseminates positive ideas. In conclusion, I opine that skills assist students to elevate themselves in every point of life, and it can be possible with an effective collaboration of many abilities. Here, I support the latter one.
In the salad days of the millennium, the society is
Possible spelling mistake. 'polarised' is British English.
polarised
into two groups almost
equally
. Regarding the notion that, whether
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schools
should enrol
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students
as per their academic
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abilities
, while others are against it.
However
,
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different
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people
have their distinct mindset. In my opinion, academic institutions should
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student
of various
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skills
and
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ability
.
Thus
, everyone can experience each others part. The following paragraphs would shed light on both the approaches
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before
making a final note.

To commence with the
first
notion, there are myriad things to share in its
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favour
. Burden and pressure of
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different
subjects will be
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reduced
,
correspondingly
it will enable
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students
to acquire knowledge without any anxiety, or any ramification.
For instance
, It has
been found
in
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many
surveys that
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students
who are pursuing their talent, they are more successful than others.
Moreover
, every individual has
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different
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abilities
to perceive and cope with any problem, thereby it is paramount to pay heed on
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students
as per their academic
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abilities
which in turn will facilitate myriad
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positive
things for
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school
as well
as for students.

Shifting towards the second
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school
of
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thought
, Classification of
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students
may create a
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negative
atmosphere in
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schools
, which is again erroneous for the growth of
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students
, as it may bring feelings of discrimination,
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but
if all
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students
are coming together, then they can learn
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many
valuable things which are essential to be successful such as they can mingle with
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students
of various thoughts, mindset,
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skills
, religions and
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so
on, which
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students
can never acquire from any book.
In addition
, In this sensible world, it will
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help
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students
to foster harmony and fraternity thereby beneficial again for their future.
Furthermore
, various
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skills
from
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students
can create a fruitful fusion in
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school
, which
directly
or
indirectly
disseminates
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positive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
.

In conclusion
, I opine that
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skills
assist
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students
to elevate themselves in every point of life, and it can be possible with an effective collaboration of
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many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
abilities
. Here, I support the latter one.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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