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Some people think that schools should concentrate on academic classes, because they are helpful for future career. And they think music and sports classes are not useful.

Some people think that schools should concentrate on academic classes, because they are helpful for future career. And they think music and sports classes are not useful. gYopD
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IELTS essay Some people think that schools should concentrate on academic classes, because they are helpful for future career. And they think music and sports classes are not useful.

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238 words
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