Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in term of aid for health care and education.To what extend do you agree ?

Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in term of aid for health care and education. 6xob0
It is argued by some individuals that wealthy nations ought to help destitute nations in health and education sector. I strongly support this statement and believe that it is the responsibility of developed nations to look after developing nations. To embark on, lots of developed nations in the world like America, China, India, these nation assist in health equipment and education to underdeveloped countries. When the countries is suffering form natural calamities like flood, landslide, earthquack there is always other nations who lend help to these nations. For instance, Nepal was the victim of earthquack in 2017, during this period, countries like India and Chine helped billions of medical resources. Furthermore, during the corona virus pandemic countries like Indian has helped million dose of vaccine to poor nations to fight against the virus. Moreover, there are several countries which has supported to build different school and universities in the remote areas of developing nations. For instance, America has funded to bulid school in Mustang, which is one of the underdeveloped place of Nepal. In addition, many teacher in Nepal get salary not from their government, but they are paid from international fund. On the other hand, some people opine that every countries should be independent and should not seek help form other nations. This is because if nations depends on other then no nation will be developed. There are various example of nations in the world, these countries always wanted to get help by other nations so people misuse the fund, and this will increase corruption in the countries. Furthermore, this countries will always be dominated by powerful nations in the world. For instance, Nepal depend on nations like China, and Indian for everything from medical to goods like fruits, and vegetable, and this countries sometime implement blockage to developing nations, which hampers economy of nations. In conclusion, we cannot deny the fact that many advance nations always help to well-off nations in terms of medical fund who are the victims of war and natural disaster, however, there is opposing views that other countries must not aid due to the fact that politicians will be more like parasite.
It
is argued
by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
individuals that wealthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
ought to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
destitute
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
in health and education sector. I
strongly
support this statement and believe that it is the responsibility of developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
to look after developing nations.

To embark on, lots of developed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
in the world like America, China, India, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
assist in health equipment and education to underdeveloped
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
. When the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
You should probably use: "are".
is
suffering form natural calamities like flood, landslide,
Possible spelling mistake found.
earthquack
there is always
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
who lend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
to these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
.
For instance
, Nepal was the victim of
Possible spelling mistake found.
earthquack
in 2017, during this period,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
like India and Chine
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
billions of medical resources.
Furthermore
, during the
The term "coronavirus" (= disease) is spelled as one word.
corona virus
pandemic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
like Indian has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
Use "a million" or use a number before 'million'.
million
Possible agreement error. The noun 'dose' seems to be countable, so consider using: "doses".
dose
of vaccine to poor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
to fight against the virus.
Moreover
, there are several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
which has supported to build
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
school and universities in the remote areas of developing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
.
For instance
, America has funded to
Possible spelling mistake found.
bulid
school in Mustang, which is one of the underdeveloped place of Nepal.
In addition
,
Possible agreement error. The noun teacher seems to be countable; consider using: "many teachers".
many teacher
in Nepal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
salary not from their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they
are paid
from international fund.

On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
opine that every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "country"?
countries
should be independent and should not seek
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
form
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
depends on
Did you mean "other than"?
other then
no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
will
be developed
. There are various example of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
in the world, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
always wanted to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
misuse the fund, and this will increase corruption in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
.
Furthermore
,
Did you mean "these"?
this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
will always
be dominated
by powerful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
in the world.
For instance
, Nepal
The singular proper name 'Nepal' must be used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "depends", "depended".
depend
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
like China, and Indian for everything from medical to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
like fruits, and vegetable, and
Did you mean "these"?
this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
sometime implement blockage to developing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
, which hampers economy of nations.

In conclusion
, we cannot deny the fact that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
advance
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
always
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
to well-off
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nations
in terms of medical fund who are the victims of war and natural disaster,
however
,
Did you mean "there are opposing views"?
there is opposing views
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
not aid due to the fact that politicians will be more like parasite.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in term of aid for health care and education.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in term of aid for health care and education.To what extend do you agree ?