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some people think that plastic shopping bags should be prohibited because they are one of the major pollutants of both land and water around the world. I completely agree, but I think there are other measures that can be taken before putting a complete ba v.2

some people think that plastic shopping bags should be prohibited because they are one of the major pollutants of both land and water around the world. I completely agree, but I think there are other measures that can be taken before putting a complete ba v. 2
Plastic bags are the most dangerous pollutant in this world. When these plastic bags are discarded from our homes are dumped in to landfill sites and oceans create catastrophic disaster for every living being on earth. Even though the government bans the plastic bag production but still they are being circulated illegally. In the following essay, I will illustrate other measures which will reduce the usage of plastic bags. Firstly, people' s behaviour of using the plastic bags should be changed, by organizing meeting at public places in order to create awareness about the irreversible damage when they are dumped into land fill sites. Additionally, cash backs should be provided at shops for customer who bring their cotton bags, this will encourage more people deter plastic bags. For instance, one nearby retail outlet, introduced 1 percent cash back to all their customer who bring cotton bags, within 3 months around 90 percent of their customers adopted to use cloth bags for shopping. Secondly, some illegal plastic bag manufacturers sell their products to all shops very secretly. The government should punish companies who produce plastic bags beyond allowable microns prescribed by the safety authority. For example, the recent raid conducted at the very famous hotel chain found that, the plastic boxes could potential threat for people who consume and store foods. Finally, the government should introduce new mechanism to recycle the discarded plastic bags into other reusable products which are less harm full for the atmosphere. Countries like Sweden has already generated electricity from the plastic waste. Such measure is being considered as highly recommended to reduce the space it occupies in the land fill sites and suffice the needs of electricity for people. In conclusion, it is our responsibility to preserve our planet for our future generation. The discarded plastics bags are not bio-degradable would have cascading impact to all living beings. Thus, it has been considered that consumer' s behaviour and government' s method of recycling are vital measures which bring down impacts to a great extent.
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Plastic
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bags
are the most
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dangerous
pollutant in this world. When these
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plastic
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bags
are discarded
from our homes
are dumped
in to landfill sites and oceans create catastrophic disaster for every living being on earth.
Even though
the
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government
bans the
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plastic
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bag
production
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but
still
they are
being circulated
illegally
. In the following essay, I will illustrate other measures which will
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reduce
the usage of
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plastic
bags.

Firstly
,
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#039; s
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behaviour
of using the
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plastic
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bags
should be
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changed
, by organizing meeting at public places in order to create awareness about the irreversible damage when they
are dumped
into land fill sites.
Additionally
, cash backs should
be provided
at shops for customer
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who
bring their cotton
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bags
, this will encourage more
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people
deter
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plastic
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bags
.
For instance
, one nearby retail outlet, introduced 1 percent cash back to all their customer
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who
bring cotton
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bags
, within 3 months around 90 percent of their customers adopted to
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use
cloth
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bags
for shopping.

Secondly
,
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some
illegal
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plastic
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bag
manufacturers sell their products to all shops
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very
secretly
. The
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government
should punish
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companies
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who
produce
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plastic
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bags
beyond allowable microns prescribed by the safety authority.
For example
, the recent raid conducted at the
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very
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famous
hotel chain found that, the
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plastic
boxes could
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potential
threat for
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people
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who
consume and store foods.

Finally
, the
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government
should introduce new mechanism to recycle the discarded
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
into other reusable products which are less harm full for the atmosphere. Countries like Sweden has already generated electricity from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
waste. Such measure is
being considered
as
highly
recommended to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the space it occupies in the land fill sites and suffice the needs of electricity for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

In conclusion
, it is our responsibility to preserve our planet for our future generation. The discarded
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plastics
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bags
are not bio-degradable would have cascading impact to all living beings.
Thus
, it has
been considered
that
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consumer&
#039; s
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behaviour
and
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government&
#039; s method of recycling are vital measures which bring down impacts to a great extent.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that plastic shopping bags should be prohibited because they are one of the major pollutants of both land and water around the world. I completely agree, but I think there are other measures that can be taken before putting a complete ba v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
338 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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