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Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying in their career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

On the other hand, most people do not want to work in a routine job. In most cases, several employees desire to shift their job in order to find other work which conforms to their desires. Frequently change jobs allow workers that widen up their knowledge and experiences about the other fields, consequently this can lead to widening up their background. Moreover, workers may be dissatisfied with their current working environment, that is why, they might change their job in order to attain a positive working atmosphere. Finally, job satisfaction is often the result of working conditions, rather than the career itself. For example, a positive working atmosphere, enthusiastic colleagues, and an inspirational boss can make working life much more satisfying, regardless of the profession. In conclusion, I am in favor of early job selection, whereas it is undeniable fact that workers often changing their jobs in order to get delighted with their career
On the other hand
, most
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people
do not want to work in a routine
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job
.
In most cases
, several employees desire to shift their
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job
in order to find other work which conforms to their desires.
Frequently
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change
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jobs
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allow
workers that widen up their knowledge and experiences about the other fields,
consequently
this can lead to widening up their background.
Moreover
, workers may
be dissatisfied
with their
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current
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working
environment,
that is
why, they might
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change
their
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job
in order to attain a
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positive
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working
atmosphere.
Finally
,
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job
satisfaction is
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often
the result of
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working
conditions,
rather
than the career itself.
For example
, a
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positive
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working
atmosphere, enthusiastic colleagues, and an inspirational boss can
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make
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working
life much more satisfying, regardless of the profession.

In conclusion
, I am in favor of early
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job
selection, whereas it is undeniable fact that workers
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often
changing their
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jobs
in order to
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get
delighted with their career
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IELTS essay Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying in their career life than those who frequently change jobs.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
153 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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