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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. g5DmD
Children's nurture and the boundaries of parents' responsibilities is one of the controversial debates in recent years. Some experts claim that parents are responsible for teaching social behaviour to children. Numerous others suggest that tutors should teach pupils the ways to be a good member of society. I will elaborate on both of these viewpoints in this essay, even though I share the first view. On the one hand, large groups of people insist on parents' role in forming children's character. Parents are the first persons with whom infants interact; thus, they have a vital role in a child's personality. So, the parentship us more than providing the physical requirement and they should teach social and moral values to their child. Because when the students go to school, their character foundation is formed, and tutors only can be the reason for personality evolution. On the other hand, several people opine that school is the place to teach children how to be a good society member. They believe that each family has its particular culture, and everyone teaches different criteria about being a good person to the children. Consequently, one of the teacher's duties, especially in elementary school, is to give a unique definition of a good citizen and train pupils proper behaviour. Having manifested the aforementioned points of view, several think that the parent has to teach social behaviour values to their children because family is the first society that children contact. On the contrary, others assert that each family teach their children various criteria, so schools should be the place to give children specific definition for moral values. I believe that the second viewpoint ignores that, beyond the family cultures disparity, the factors of a responsible and productive member of society have a clear description and the diversity of the ways that parents treat their children cannot affect these factors.
Children's nurture and the boundaries of parents' responsibilities is one of the controversial debates in recent years.
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experts claim that
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parents
are responsible for teaching social
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behaviour
to
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children
. Numerous others suggest that tutors should
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teach
pupils the ways to be a
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good
member of
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society
. I will elaborate on both of these viewpoints in this essay,
even though
I share the
first
view.

On the one hand, large groups of
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insist on parents' role in forming children's character.
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are the
first
persons with whom infants interact;
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, they have a vital role in a child's personality.
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, the
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us more than providing the physical
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requirement and
they should
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teach
social and moral values to their child.
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when the students go to
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school
, their character foundation
is formed
, and tutors
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can be the reason for personality evolution.

On the other hand
, several
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opine that
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is the place to
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children
how to be a
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good
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member. They believe that each
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family
has its particular culture, and everyone
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teaches
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different
criteria about being a
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good
person to the
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children
.
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, one of the teacher's duties,
especially
in elementary
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school
, is to give a unique definition of a
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good
citizen and train pupils proper
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behaviour
.

Having manifested the aforementioned points of view, several
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parent
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has to
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social
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values to their
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children
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because
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is the
first
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that
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contact.
On the contrary
, others assert that each
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family
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teach
their
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children
various criteria,
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so
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schools
should be the place to give
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children
specific definition for moral values. I believe that the second viewpoint
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ignores
that, beyond the
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family
cultures disparity, the factors of a responsible and productive member of
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society
have a
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clear
description and the diversity of the ways that
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parents
treat their
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children
cannot affect these factors.
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IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
311 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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