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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better forchildren to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than tochoose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specificreasons and examples to support your answer.

It is better forchildren to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than tochoose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specificreasons and examples to support your answer. NrVBy
In my opinion, it is critical that the children should choose their jobs similar to their parents. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay. To begin with, the parents already have a lot of working experiences. As the children grow up, the parents have already taught them about their work. The kids not only already know how to start, but also when they have any problems with their jobs, it is very convenient for them to ask their father and mother. It is obvious that the adults will definitely use all their past experiences to help their kids to overcome hardships. In addition, there will reduce the conflict between the families about what the children will do in the future. The parents believe that they have already gone through so many difficulties that they do not want their beloved kids to suffer the depression and frustration of the obstacles. If the children choose a job very different from the father and mother, it will increase the opportunity for fights between parents and children. It is clear that the family's support has played an important role during the growth of the young. People cannot live without their parents' love and care. consequently, I strongly prefer that the children should find a job similar to their parents. Last but not least, if the children choose their jobs totally different from their parents, it will be very risky for them to start their career from zero. The children not only have to learn the knowledge by themselves but also the young adults have to fight for their future alone. While the youngsters have a lack of confidence, plus, without the parents' support, apparently, the fear of making any mistake will increase the risk of failing and losing everything. The fail will not only destroy the young's confidence but also they will be afraid of taking chances for fear of failing again. In conclusion, I strongly believe that youngsters should follow their parents' footsteps and become the role of what their parents are after they have grown up, which they not only have the experience and support from the senior citizens but also do not have to take the risk of family conflicts and losing everything they have.
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. I feel this way for three reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

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grow up, the
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already
taught them about their work. The kids not
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also
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, it is
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convenient for them to ask their father and mother. It is obvious that the adults will definitely
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their kids to overcome hardships.

In addition
, there will
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reduce
the conflict between the families about what the
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children
will do in the future. The
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believe that they have
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gone through
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difficulties that they do not want their beloved kids to suffer the depression and frustration of the obstacles. If the
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children
choose a
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job
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from the father and mother, it will increase the opportunity for fights between
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and
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. It is
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that the family's support has played an
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role during the growth of the young.
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consequently
, I
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prefer that the
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should find a
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similar to their parents.

Last
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choose their
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, it will be
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risky for them to
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their career from zero. The
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not
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learn the knowledge by themselves
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also
the young adults
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fight for their future alone. While the youngsters have a lack of confidence, plus, without the parents' support,
apparently
, the fear of making any mistake will increase the
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of failing and losing everything. The fail will not
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the young's confidence
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also
they will be afraid of taking chances for fear of failing again.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that youngsters should follow their parents' footsteps and become the role of what their
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are after they have grown up, which they not
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have the experience and support from the senior citizens
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of family conflicts and losing everything they have.
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IELTS essay It is better forchildren to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than tochoose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specificreasons and examples to support your answer.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
382 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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