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some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. others however believe that school is the place to learn this. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. others however believe that school is the place to learn this. X2DO
Nowadays, the society awareness is depend on the currently and future generation, many people believe that parents must teach their children to become effective member as part of society, while others thought that the school have to take the responsibility of that. The essay will discuss the both view of the argument. Building a good society will demand a good individuals, who aware about their responsibility towards their society and that should be started from the child rearing. Parents have to educating their children about the good values, which can be contribute towards their society. Furthermore, when parents taught their children about the social values of justice, respect community and freedom, hence to build educated and conscious generation. For instance, parents need to learning their children, how to be independent person and learning them take the responsibility of their mistakes, and being fair between their children. Parents have large impact on the raising the generation to be effective individual can be helpful to their community. On the other hand, educational institution can be also have important role through their education to make responsible generation towards their community. For example, schools have to share the social values through their activities by learning children about their history and how the prior civilization contribute to their community to give the future generation live better. Moreover, university and schools have effective role towards awareness their pupils to be a good member of society. In conclusion, a good a society lead to well conscious individuals, this essay discussed the parents and education institution have large impacts on the children to learning them how to be effective person inside their community. In my opinion, parents have more intensive impacts of raising a well independent child who understand the social values and the schools could be as helping factor who strengthen those values.
Nowadays, the
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take the responsibility of that. The essay will discuss the both view of the argument.

Building a
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good
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society
will demand a
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good
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individuals
, who aware about their responsibility towards their
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society
and that should be
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started
from the child rearing.
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Parents
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have to educating
their
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children
about the
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values, which can be
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towards their
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society
.
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taught their
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children
about the social values of justice, respect
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community
and freedom,
hence
to build educated and conscious generation.
For instance
,
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parents
need to
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their
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children
, how to be independent person and
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learning
them take the responsibility of their mistakes, and being
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fair
between their
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children
.
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Parents
have large impact on the raising the generation to be
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effective
individual can be helpful to their community.

On the other hand
, educational institution can be
also
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important
role through their education to
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make
responsible generation towards their
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community
.
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,
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schools
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have to
share the social values through their activities by
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learning
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children
about their history and how the prior civilization contribute to their
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community
to give the future generation
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live
better.
Moreover
, university and
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schools
have
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effective
role towards awareness their pupils to be a
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good
member of society.

In conclusion
, a
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good
a
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society
lead to well conscious individuals, this essay discussed the
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parents
and education institution have large impacts on the
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children
to
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learning
them how to be
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effective
person inside their
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community
. In my opinion,
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parents
have more intensive impacts of raising a well independent child who understand the social values and the
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schools
could be as helping factor who strengthen those values.
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IELTS essay some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. others however believe that school is the place to learn this.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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