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Some people think that only government can bring changes in society, while other thinks individuals can also have influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that only government can bring changes in society, while other thinks individuals can also have influence. KWkGN
Public is off the opinion that only states can drastically changes the society, while others think that certain groups and people dominate the society. Government servants and socialists might support the notion that government can shape up the society, while entrepreneurs and liberals would agree that individuals hold power inside the nation in number of ways Government servants such as police and army officials would support governments since they are loyal to the state. Firstly, these public officials perceive that government play crucial role in policy making and that they would support local people and benefit them. Moreover, such officials claim that government is a sacrosanct and untarnished institute which would ultimately solve issues for people which are insurmountable and would provide opportunities for people. Lastly, people who believe in socialism for instance Chinese people would tend to obey their government and for socialist’s government is the only protector and only they can develop the society. Liberals and Entrepreneurs are those groups that see individuals who dominate the state in numerous ways. First of all, Liberals are of the opinion that individuals have freedom and due to this they can transform the society which would lead to a prosper nation. Furthermore, liberal societies for instance japan tend to be people centric nation, in which people are seen to dominate and bring positive changes in society which leads to an environment that enables equality and less discriminations. Lastly, Entrepreneurs are those people that would think that individuals are more important and dominant since they tend to create nations which are impeccable due to which hierarchies’ exits and are controlled by individuals. In my opinion, individuals are the ones who makes up the society hence they are more influential. First of all, it is worth considering that all institutions such as government, judiciary and legislative are run and controlled by people hence they are more powerful. These people are responsible for the overall wellbeing and development of nation and without individuals nations cannot progress. Last but not the least, people are the ones who nourish a society and civilized it which leads to human development and sort of create a culture which tends to build a progressive state. All things being considered, people are responsible for their own welfare and thus would take actions that would benefit society as a whole which makes them very influential. In my humble opinion, individuals are the key to successful nations, these states which revolve around individuals are more developed than those who only give attention to establishment of the country.
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servants and socialists might support the notion that
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government
can shape up the
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society
, while entrepreneurs and liberals would
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agree
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individuals
hold power inside the
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in number of ways

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Government
servants such as police and army officials would support
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governments
since they are loyal to the
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state
.
Firstly
, these public officials perceive that
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government
play crucial role in policy making and that they would support local
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people
and benefit them.
Moreover
, such officials claim that
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government
is a sacrosanct and untarnished institute which would
ultimately
solve issues for
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people
which are insurmountable and would provide opportunities for
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people
.
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,
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believe in socialism
for instance
Chinese
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people
would
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government
and for socialist’s
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protector and
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they can develop the society.

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individuals
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dominate the
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state
in numerous ways.
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First of all
, Liberals are of the
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opinion
that
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individuals
have freedom and due to this they can transform the
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society
which would lead to
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Furthermore
, liberal
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societies
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japan
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tend
to be
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people
centric
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nation
, in which
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people
are
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seen
to dominate and bring
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changes
in
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which leads to an environment that enables equality and
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and dominant since they
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to create
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nations
which are impeccable due to which hierarchies’ exits and
are controlled
by individuals.

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individuals
are the ones
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makes
up the
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hence
they are more influential.
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First of all
, it is worth considering that all institutions such as
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government
, judiciary and legislative
are run
and controlled by
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people
hence
they are more powerful. These
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people
are responsible for the
overall
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wellbeing
and development of
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and without
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cannot progress. Last
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are the ones
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nourish a
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society
and civilized it which leads to human development and sort of create a culture which
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tends
to build a progressive state.

All things
being considered
,
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people
are responsible for their
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own
welfare and
thus
would take actions that would benefit
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society
as a whole which
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makes
them
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influential. In my humble
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,
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are the key to successful
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nations
, these
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states
which revolve around
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are more developed than those
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only
give attention to establishment of the country.
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IELTS essay Some people think that only government can bring changes in society, while other thinks individuals can also have influence.

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