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ome people think it is more important to build parks in the open spaces in cities than to build more housing.

ome people think it is more important to build parks in the open spaces in cities than to build more housing. GwElQ

Although many people believe that build more houses is crucial to the development of a city. I disagree with this statement because parks are much more important to the well-being of the population. than houses. Considering houses important too, we need to have a balance between the city space for houses and the space for leisure time. Without spaces for leisure, it is impossible to have a good quality of life. To conclude, in my perspective it is more important to build parks in open spaces than houses.

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