Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people think that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is considered that in present days people are given too many alternatives. Modern achievements allow us to have access on different range of things, which I think is positive change, since multiplity of choices ensures higher quality of products, it also encourages us to learn more. Furthermore, new choices open up new perspectives, consequently, there are more ways for improvement. In a free market world, diversity of choices guarantees the quality of goods. The higher concentration is, better things are produced. In comparison, if there is only one computer creating certain products, it would not have the motivation to care about the quality and we get poor products. Multiplity of choices also affects our development. When there are many ways of doing things, we do research and learn a lot before making decisions. For example, when you are planning traveling and you can choose between several destinitions, you read some information about all of them and decides based on this knowledge. Thirdly, many choices suggest different interesting perspectives. For example, years ago, there was only one university in Georgia, thus, everyone who wanted to get higher education, had to apply there. While, nowadays, we have several universities, offering different programs and students can decide what they are interested to learn. It helps them to plan their career in correct way. To sum up, from my point of view, there are a lot of choices nowadays, but it is beneficial, sinces it ensures higher quality of products, besides allows us to learn more and make correct decitions.
It
is considered
that in present days
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
too
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
alternatives. Modern achievements
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
us to have access on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
range of things, which I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
, since
Possible spelling mistake found.
multiplity
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
ensures higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of products, it
also
encourages us to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
more.
Furthermore
, new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
open up new perspectives,
consequently
, there are more ways for improvement.

In a free market world, diversity of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
guarantees the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
. The higher concentration is, better things
are produced
.
In comparison
, if there is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one computer creating certain products, it would not have the motivation to care about the
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
quality and
we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
poor products.

Possible spelling mistake found.
Multiplity
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
also
affects our development. When there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
ways of doing things, we do research and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
a lot
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
making decisions.
For example
, when you are planning
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
traveling and
you can choose between several
Possible spelling mistake found.
destinitions
, you read
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
information about all of them and decides based on this knowledge.

Thirdly
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
suggest
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
interesting perspectives.
For example
, years ago, there was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one university in Georgia,
thus
, everyone who wanted to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
higher education, had to apply there. While, nowadays, we have several universities, offering
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
programs and students can decide what they
are interested
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
them to plan their career in correct way.

To sum up, from my point of view, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
choices
nowadays,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it is beneficial,
Possible spelling mistake found.
sinces it
ensures higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of products,
besides
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
us to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
more and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
correct
Possible spelling mistake found.
decitions
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people think that nowadays we have too many choices. with this statement?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
257 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts