Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people think that more money should be spent to promote the use of bicycles in cities. Others, however, believe that cities should focus on investing in public transport systems.

Some people think that more money should be spent to promote the use of bicycles in cities. Others, however, believe that cities should focus on investing in public transport systems. BWplm
It is true that cycling is not only one of the best ways to tackle pollution problem, but also beneficial for our health. However, in my opinion, I would argue that prioritizing the development of public transportation is more crucial. On the one hand, there are a variety of benefits from cycling for both environment and human. One tangible advantage is that encouragement of bicycle use is an effective way to curb the excessive carbon dioxide emission. In addition, less space is needed for bikes due to their simplicity and lightness, which means that people can travel on various types of terrain from main streets to alleyways. Furthermore, along with the eco-friendly characteristic and convenience, cycling also plays an important part in improving our health and keeping us stay robust. The positive impacts on the cardiovascular system are perfect examples of how we can gain our health by cycling. On the other hand, despite these featuring benefits of cycling, public transportation should be the main concern of governments. The most fundamental reason is that public transportation is known to be more common and applicable to everybody. In other words, people who live in suburbs can take advantage of it to go to many different destinations, while the bicycle is only ideal for those who do not travel much. One obvious upside is that the more people commute by public transportation, the less personal vehicles are needed; therefore, this helps to reduce not only the contamination, but also the burden of traffic congestion. Last but not least, by investing in public transport system, there would be a great amount of demand for jobs and clearly a lot of people will benefit from this. In conclusion, I believe that governments should pay more attention to the development of public transportation because this is a vital need for the 1ast-growing pace of our society.
It is true that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycling
is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
one of the best ways to tackle pollution

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
problem
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
beneficial for our health.
However
, in my opinion, I

would argue that prioritizing the development of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
is

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
more
crucial.

On the one hand, there are a variety of benefits from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycling
for both

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
environment
and human. One tangible advantage is that encouragement
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
of


bicycle
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
is an effective way to curb the excessive carbon dioxide

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
emission
.
In addition
, less space
is needed
for bikes due to their
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
simplicity


and lightness, which means that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can travel on various types of

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
terrain
from main streets to alleyways.
Furthermore
, along with the eco-friendly characteristic and convenience,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycling
also
plays an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
part

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
in
improving our health and keeping us stay robust. The
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
impacts


on the cardiovascular system are perfect examples of how we can gain our

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
health
by cycling.

On the other hand
, despite these featuring benefits of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cycling
, public

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
transportation
should be the main concern of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
. The
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
most


fundamental reason is that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
is known
to be more

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
common
and applicable to everybody.
In other words
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
in


suburbs can take advantage of it to go to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
destinations, while

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
the
bicycle is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
ideal for those who do not travel much. One
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
obvious


upside is that the more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
commute by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
, the less

personal vehicles
are needed
;
therefore
, this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
contamination
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
the burden of traffic congestion. Last
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
not least,

by investing in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transport system, there would be a great amount of

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
demand
for jobs and
clearly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
will benefit from this.

In conclusion
, I believe that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should pay more attention to the

development of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
this is a vital need for the

1ast-growing pace of our society.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people think that more money should be spent to promote the use of bicycles in cities. Others, however, believe that cities should focus on investing in public transport systems.

Essay
  American English
27 paragraphs
311 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Some people think that more money should be spent to promote the use of bicycles in cities. Others, however, believe that cities should focus on investing in public transport systems.