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One of the consequences of imptoved medical care is that people are living longer advantage disadvantage

One of the consequences of imptoved medical care is that people are living longer advantage disadvantage RWDyY
On the one hand, medical care couse the soceity to have more elderly people, and it needs more nurses and drs in hospital that triggers insurance and goverment to spend a large number of money. Although elder people imposing cost on goverment, but they are likely to support youngers. Forexample, they can help them to raise children, and play an essential role to ensure them to keep on working, and play a role in community growth.
On the one hand, medical care
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couse
the
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soceity
to have more elderly
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people
, and it needs more nurses and
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drs
in hospital that triggers insurance and
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goverment
to spend
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a large number of
money.

Although elder
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people
imposing cost on
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goverment
,
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but
they are likely to support
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youngers
.
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Forexample
, they can
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help
them to raise children, and play an essential role to ensure them to
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keep
on working, and play a role in community growth.
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IELTS essay One of the consequences of imptoved medical care is that people are living longer advantage disadvantage

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
76 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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