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Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

One of the most conspicuous trends of today’s world is a colossal upsurge in the number of people who believe that men and women have distinct features. After a lot of analysis, I have taken a decision. I completely agree that women are capable of doing jobs in comparison to men. Like medical fields, teaching fields, the list goes on. On one side of the argument, modern women are capable of all jobs compare to men. Firstly, I would like to elaborate on his hospital jobs. Large numbers of females are in demand in most countries females in medical professionals are needed to treat females more patiently than males. Furthermore, the example presented next provides extra strength like gynecology, physical therapists, nurses. Secondly, I like to elaborate that the teaching profession, as more female teachers are in demand because of non-co-education school. Male teachers/professors are not preferable because of the privacy of the female student. Here, I will give a clear-cut example of Dr. Kiran Bedi from India, who was a politician, retired IPS officer, social activist, and former tennis player. So, I totally support females are eligible for all jobs. On another side of arguments, males are not expected to do the house-hold activity and child care. In previous centuries, people say men are blessed with good physical stamina, decisiveness, or strong will, allowing them to be well qualified for armed forces. For example, men can perform military service or enter the security forces because they can be confronted with aggressive robbers or combat foreign invaders. Similarly, women, considered being the weaker sex, tend to be emotional, considerate, or meticulous, make it possible for them to become prominent at doing household chores or taking responsibility for childcare. In conclusion, although it’s both genders have unique qualities making they suited for several jobs. Finally, I believe that females are capable of having the same type of job irrespective of male.
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’s world is a colossal upsurge in the number of
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people
who believe that
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men
and
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women
have distinct features. After
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a lot of
analysis, I have taken a decision. I completely
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agree
that
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women
are capable of doing
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jobs
in comparison
to
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men
. Like medical fields, teaching fields, the list goes on.

On one side of the argument, modern
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women
are capable of all
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jobs
compare to
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men
.
Firstly
, I would like to elaborate on his hospital
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jobs
. Large numbers of
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females
are in demand in most countries
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females
in medical professionals
are needed
to treat
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females
more
patiently
than
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males
.
Furthermore
, the example presented
next
provides extra strength like gynecology, physical therapists, nurses.

Secondly
, I like to elaborate that the teaching profession, as more
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female
teachers are in demand
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because
of non-co-education school. Male teachers/professors are not preferable
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because
of the privacy of the
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female
student. Here, I will give a
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clear
-
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example of Dr. Kiran
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Bedi
from India, who was a politician, retired IPS officer, social activist, and former tennis player.
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So
, I
totally
support
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females
are eligible for all jobs.

On another side of arguments,
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males
are not
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expected
to do the
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house
-hold activity and child care. In previous centuries,
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people
say
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men
are blessed
with
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good
physical stamina, decisiveness, or strong will, allowing them to be well qualified for armed forces.
For example
,
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men
can perform military service or enter the security forces
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because
they can
be confronted
with aggressive robbers or combat foreign invaders.

Similarly
,
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women
, considered being the
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weaker sex
, tend to be emotional, considerate, or meticulous,
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make
it possible for them to become prominent at doing household chores or taking responsibility for childcare.

In conclusion
, although it’s both genders have unique qualities making they suited for several
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jobs
.
Finally
, I believe that
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females
are capable of having the same type of
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job
irrespective of male.
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IELTS essay Some people think that men and women have different qualities. Therefore, some certain jobs are suitable for men and some jobs are suitable for women.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
320 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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