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Some people think that living in big citics is bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that living in big citics is bad for people's health. KWXE1
These days, many people are shifting from rural areas to urban or metropolitan cities for a variety of reasons. In this context, some masses opine that residing in urban areas may be harmful for the health of the individuals. This essay will delve into this viewpoint and shall put forth my opinion in the subsequent paragraphs. Irrefutably, the population in urban societies is increasing constantly as a consequence of migration of people from rural areas. However, numerous reasons can be highlighted that result into this social mobility. Firstly, the high standards of living offered by the urban societies instigates the rural people to migrate to these areas. Secondly, the deficiency of highly paid jobs in rural areas, where the primary source of income is agriculture, incites to the villagers to migrate to big cities in hope of aquiring a good job and a higher standard of living. Probing further, this migration of rural societies, however, results into many far-reaching repercussions. Out of all the aspects, community health and well being is the worst affected. . As a consequence of the population explosion, there is a dramatic hike in the demand of food supplies due to which many synthetic food products are sold to the people. This type of food is likely to cause many serious health complications, ranging from intestinal diseases to even cardiovascular diseases. Moving further, higher population undeniably results into an increased traffic on the roads. The high amount of traffic produces large amounts of pollutants that deastically impact the quality of air. It is a well proven fact that respiring in contaminated air seriously damages the lungs and hence this yet again proves detrimental to the health of the local people. In my opinion, I firmly agree that living in metropolitan cities is definitely deletrious to one's health. However, this can indead be controlled if migration is prevented by any means. Governments should introduce good job offers for the rural people is in the villages only so that they do not feel the need of moving to urban areas.
These days,
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are shifting from
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rural
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areas
to
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urban
or metropolitan cities for a variety of reasons. In this context,
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some
masses opine that residing in
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urban
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areas
may be harmful for the
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health
of the individuals. This essay will delve into this viewpoint and shall put forth my opinion in the subsequent paragraphs.

Irrefutably
, the population in
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urban
societies is increasing
constantly
as a consequence of migration of
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people
from
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rural
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areas
.
However
, numerous reasons can
be highlighted
that result into this social mobility.
Firstly
, the high standards of living offered by the
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urban
societies instigates the
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rural
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people
to migrate to these
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areas
.
Secondly
, the deficiency of
highly
paid jobs in
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rural
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areas
, where the primary source of income is agriculture, incites to the villagers to migrate to
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big
cities in hope of
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aquiring
a
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good
job and a higher standard of living.

Probing
further
, this migration of
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rural
societies,
however
, results into
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many
far-reaching repercussions. Out of all the aspects, community
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health
and
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well being
is the worst
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affected
.
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.
As a consequence of the population explosion, there is a dramatic hike in the demand of food supplies due to which
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many
synthetic food products
are sold
to the
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people
. This type of food is likely to cause
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many
serious
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health
complications, ranging from intestinal diseases to even cardiovascular diseases.

Moving
further
, higher population
undeniably
results into an increased traffic on the roads. The high amount of traffic produces large amounts of pollutants that
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deastically
impact the quality of air. It is a well proven fact that respiring in contaminated air
seriously
damages the lungs and
hence
this
yet
again proves detrimental to the
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health
of the local
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people
.

In my opinion, I
firmly
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agree
that living in metropolitan cities is definitely
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deletrious
to one's
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health
.
However
, this can
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indead
be controlled
if migration is
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prevented
by any means.
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Governments
should introduce
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good
job offers for the
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rural
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people
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is
in the villages
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only
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so
that they do not feel the need of moving to
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urban
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areas
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that living in big citics is bad for people's health.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
342 words
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