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Investment of Public Park

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I think that investing in public park is good way for especially people. In the modern world public park is essential to social life. The park areas have become a very well face to face interaction with people and social activities place thanks to investment. I personally believe that public park is beneficial for people from all ages. It leads to healthy, economical and social activities. First of all, public parks reduce air pollution, green space helps to encourage active life styles. Suc as jogging, cycling and walking with friends. Public parks reduce stress and in turn it reduces healtcare costs. Secondly, public parks are areas ato attract not only locals but also tourists and this generate income for nearby businesses like restaurants, cafe etc. In conclusion, public park advantages can be listed as reduces air pollution, heps to encourage active life, reduces stress and reduces healthcare cost. Parks can be considered valuable assets that provide economical and social benefits for governments and communities.
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that investing in
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public
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park
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people
. In the modern world
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public
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park
is essential to
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social
life. The
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park
areas have become a
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very
well face to face interaction with
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people
and
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activities place thanks to investment. I
personally
believe that
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public
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park
is beneficial for
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people
from all ages. It leads to healthy, economical and
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social
activities.
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,
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public
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parks
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reduce
air pollution, green space
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helps
to encourage active life styles.
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Suc
as jogging, cycling and walking with friends.
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Public
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parks
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reduce
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stress
and in turn it
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reduces
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healtcare
costs.
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,
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public
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parks
are areas
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attract not
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only
locals
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tourists and this generate income for nearby businesses like restaurants,
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cafe
etc.
In conclusion
,
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public
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park
advantages can
be listed
as
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reduces
air pollution,
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heps
to encourage active life,
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reduces
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stress
and
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reduces
healthcare cost.
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Parks
can
be considered
valuable assets that provide economical and
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social
benefits for
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governments
and communities.

IELTS essay Investment of Public Park

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
164 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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