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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others think that people cannot expect to enjoy a job and having a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others think that people cannot expect to enjoy a job and having a permanent job is more important. WXMW
One group of people argued that a satisfying job is more essential than work protection whereas, others believe that work security for a permanent job is mandatory than job satisfaction. Let's discuss both viewpoints prior to my opinion. On the one hand, People suggest that candidates ought to select their liked job then only, they can work with their full satisfaction. Globally, 90% of candidates are working as per their family wishes and they are not ready to do their work with full satisfaction. Consequently, the candidate can not achieve their target and not able to achieve satisfaction. For instance, a survey is conducted in Australia regarding job satisfaction. As a result, 60% of candidates are not happy with their work. On the other hand, It is good if the candidate gets a permanent job rather than a temporary placement. It has numerous benefits like health insurance, pension, and medical leave. It helps the worker to reach high status and settle in their life with high salary. For instance, government employees have a beneficiary scheme like medical care, house loan, and other benefits. In conclusion, I suggest that candidates have to give more priority to a permanent job in order to get the extra benefits. In my point of view, job security is more vital than work satisfaction.
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argued that a satisfying
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is more essential than
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protection whereas, others believe that
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security for a permanent
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job
is
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mandatory
than
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's discuss both viewpoints prior to my opinion. On the one hand,
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suggest that
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candidates
ought to select their liked
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then
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, they can
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work
with their full
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. Globally, 90% of
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candidates
are working as per their family
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wishes and
they are not ready to do their
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with full
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.
Consequently
, the
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candidate
can not achieve their target and not able to achieve
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satisfaction
.
For instance
, a survey
is conducted
in Australia regarding
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job
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satisfaction
.
As a result
, 60% of
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candidates
are not happy with their
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work
.
On the other hand
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if the
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a permanent
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rather
than a temporary placement. It has numerous benefits like health insurance, pension, and medical
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. It
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the worker to reach high status and settle in their life with high salary.
For instance
,
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government
employees have a beneficiary scheme like medical care,
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house
loan, and other benefits.
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, I suggest that
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candidates
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have to
give more priority to a permanent
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job
in order to
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get
the extra benefits. In my point of view,
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security is more vital than
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work
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satisfaction
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others think that people cannot expect to enjoy a job and having a permanent job is more important.

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