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Some people think that it is fine for professional sportsmen and sportswomen to misbehave on or off the field, as long as they are playing well. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people think that it is fine for professional sportsmen and sportswomen to misbehave on or off the field, as long as they are playing well. G0We
Being a professional sportsmen they should be aware of their behaviour. Misbehaving on or off the field, as long as they are playing well is a topic of discussion for many people. A sportsmen or sportswomen are famous and they have immense fan following. There's always an eye watching them, Being under someone's presence is difficult. There are millions of people who follow them and admire the work they do. To reach and gain so much following and respect one should go through several tough times, just by doing some silly things they cannot loose their respect that they have gained. As many people follow and copy their style and behaviour, if the sportsmen or sportswomen misbehaves on or off the field, the common people might think, misbehaving is not a big deal. Chances of replicating their favourite sportsmen is high. However, it's not correct to misbehave or disrespect others even if they are celebrities or common people. Misbehaving I'm public might affect their carrier. Even though some people think it's okay to misbehave as long as their performance is good, but it's against the law. Wealth should never bring pride or courage to do things which are not acceptable. Misbehaving affects two people and their families as well, and many people take them as role model to do so. To conclude, misbehaving is not allowed to do by anyone, whether it's a sportsmen or sportswomen on or off the field irrespective of their performance in the field. It's a punishable offence.
Being a professional
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sportsmen
they should be aware of their
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behaviour
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Misbehaving
on or off the
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field
, as long as they are playing well is a topic of discussion for
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many
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people
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A sportsmen
or sportswomen are
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famous and
they have immense fan following. There's always an eye watching them, Being under someone's presence is difficult. There are millions of
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people
who follow them and admire the work they do. To reach and gain
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so
much following and respect one should go through several tough times,
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just
by doing
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some
silly things they cannot
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loose
their respect that they have gained. As
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many
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people
follow and copy their style and
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behaviour
, if the sportsmen or sportswomen misbehaves on or off the
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field
, the common
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people
might
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think
,
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misbehaving
is not a
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big
deal. Chances of replicating their
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favourite
sportsmen is high.
However
,
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it's
not correct to misbehave or disrespect others even if they are celebrities or common
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people
.
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Misbehaving
I'm public might affect their carrier.
Even though
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some
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people
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think
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it's
okay to misbehave as long as their performance is
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good
,
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but
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it's
against the law. Wealth should never bring pride or courage to do things which are not acceptable.
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Misbehaving
affects two
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people
and their families
as well
, and
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many
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people
take them as role model to do
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so
.

To conclude
,
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misbehaving
is not
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allowed
to do by anyone, whether
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it's
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a sportsmen
or sportswomen on or off the
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field
irrespective of their performance in the
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field
.
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It's
a punishable
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offence
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is fine for professional sportsmen and sportswomen to misbehave on or off the field, as long as they are playing well.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
252 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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