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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. EGJL
In this fast pace moving world, men and women want to learn things equally. Some people believe that co-education system is better for our new generation young female and males while, others believe that many people avoid sending their children to get co-education under one roof. Following easy will discuss both views. Firstly, is this world where women want equal rights and benefits as men are having and woman want to stop genocide of them and due to this they want to learn education with boys. That will help them to build their confidence in future whenever they go for job interview in any conglomerate firm they will not hesitate in front of men. For instance, Beaconhouse School in Pakistan is the first school that initiate co-education learning due to this 95% women snatch first 10 position as compared to men. Moreover, it is essential to escalate this awareness of getting combined schooling. Secondly, there is always two sides of any coin. To attend combine education may lead to inexplicable jeopardy, men will be attracted to women and this can lead to vulnerable situation for parents. Every year there are number of sexual assault cases reported in different part of world. But for instance, In Saudi Arabia there are zero rape cases recorded from on decade as men women are getting education separately. It is therefore, to be more focused on education rather than other things. In conclusion, it all depend on oneself that they want co-education or not. It is always healthy that to get schooling collectively, remove fear and shyness in both. A better schooling lead to a better future.
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believe that co-education system is better for our new generation young female and males while, others believe that
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many
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avoid sending their children to
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get
co-education under one roof. Following easy will discuss both views.

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, is this world where
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women
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want
equal rights and benefits as
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men
are having and woman
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want
to
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stop
genocide of them and due to this they
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want
to learn
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education
with boys. That will
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help
them to build their confidence in future whenever they go for job interview in any conglomerate firm they will not hesitate in front of
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men
.
For instance
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Beaconhouse
School in Pakistan is the
first
school that initiate co-education learning due to this 95%
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women
snatch
first
10 position as compared to
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men
.
Moreover
, it is essential to escalate this awareness of getting combined schooling.

Secondly
, there is always two sides of any coin. To attend combine
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education
may lead to inexplicable jeopardy,
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men
will
be attracted
to
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women
and this can lead to vulnerable situation for parents. Every year there are number of sexual assault cases reported in
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different
part of world.
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But
for instance
, In Saudi Arabia there are zero rape cases recorded from on decade as
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men
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women
are getting
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education
separately
. It is
therefore
, to be more focused on
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education
rather
than other things.

In conclusion
, it all depend on oneself that they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
co-education or not. It is always healthy that to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
schooling
collectively
, remove fear and shyness in both. A better schooling lead to a better future.

IELTS essay Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools.

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4 paragraphs
272 words
6.0
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