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Some people think that in this modern world people are getting dependent on each other, while others think that this world makes them more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that in this modern world people are getting dependent on each other, while others think that this world makes them more independent of each other. jldM
Today's era is internet age and Hence Enormous tasks are accomplished with help of machines and computers, On the other hand a lot of work still depends upon designated folks to make it happen. In the following paragraphs I would like to elaborate on how we depend on others but can accomplish others on our own. In the light o the fact a variety of Services, Events or Operations totally depends on associated people, Eventually a companies success full operations are immensely rely upon working together in harmony. Moreover institutions services directly related to Buyer-Seller relation, For example a mobile company launched a phone, People buy it at the respective stores. Brand made a product and got connected with its audience hence its profits solely depends on the volume which is sold. Therefore looking at larger picture a lot depends upon masses as potential buyers. On the other hand with internet boom, A number of occasion we become independent. Now days if we need any knowledge most of it is available just couple of clicks away. A number of things are done with help of computers and robots, like manufacturing of cars, less number of people working in manufacturing. Secondly It's cost effective to have less employees on monthly salary. As we are relying more and more on machines, less we will be in need of people for work. I think in todays world we are progressing towards automatic machines solving our most of the problems. Those days are not far away when artificial intelligence guided robots will do most of the jobs hence making dependence on people less and less common.
Today
's era is internet age and
Hence
Enormous tasks
are accomplished
with
help
of machines and computers, On the
other
hand
a lot of
work
still
depends upon designated folks to
make
it happen. In the following paragraphs I would like to elaborate on how we depend on others
but
can accomplish others on our
own
.

In the light o the fact a variety of Services,
Events
or Operations
totally
depends on associated
people
,
Eventually
a
companies
success full operations are
immensely
rely
upon working together in harmony.
Moreover
institutions services
directly
related to Buyer-Seller relation,
For example
a mobile
company
launched a phone,
People
buy
it at the respective stores. Brand made a product and
got
connected with its audience
hence
its profits
solely
depends on the volume which
is sold
.
Therefore
looking at larger picture a lot depends upon masses as potential buyers.

On the
other
hand with internet boom, A number of occasion we become independent.
Now
days if we need any knowledge most of it is available
just
couple of clicks away. A number of things
are done
with
help
of computers and robots, like manufacturing of cars,
less
number of
people
working in manufacturing.
Secondly
It's cost effective to have
less
employees on monthly salary. As we are relying more and more on machines,
less
we will be in need of
people
for work.

I
think
in
todays
world we are progressing towards automatic machines solving our most of the problems. Those days are not far away when artificial intelligence guided robots will do most of the jobs
hence
making dependence on
people
less
and
less
common.
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IELTS essay Some people think that in this modern world people are getting dependent on each other, while others think that this world makes them more independent of each other.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.0
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