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Some people think that in the modern world, getting old is entirely bad. Others, however, think that life of elderly in the modern world is much better than it was in the past. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that in the modern world, getting old is entirely bad. Others, however, think that life of elderly in the modern world is much better than it was in the past. 2L36
School curriculum is very vital for future generation as it play role in providing knowledge for the students. The subject in the curriculum that will be taught in school has become a hotly-debated topic that often divides opinion. Many say that school should set out science and technology knowledge as it is very crucial in this modern world. Yet others think that History should still be taught as they can give a better understanding of the world. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument. It cannot be denied that technology is here to stay in our society. The development of technology and scientific knowledge are predominant in today's world. It brings the human quality of life to an unforeseen level. As science and technology can solve any issue in the world over the period. The founding of much medical treatment and the growth of technology that help human lives are examples of the importance of science. Furthermore, Many claim that science can give an objective point of view as science was proven with reliable methods and scientific reasoning. It can give better projection in the future and deny any conjecture. For example, thanks to science and technology, people nowadays can anticipate natural disasters with disaster early warning systems. Nevertheless, we cannot exclude history from the education curriculum. The ignorance to pay attention to history can lead people to fall on the same mistakes. Studying the past can give us the understanding that our present situation is neither natural nor inevitable. For instance, humans took a chance on the industrial revolution to create modern warfare. Many people misused the creation of industrial technology as a tool for destruction. By reflecting and studying closely on history, humans can be more aware of the ethics of using technology in the coming era. To sum up, science and technology proficiency is on-demand in today's world as society is trying to solve many global problems. However, history is still an indispensable subject. Excluding history on educational discussion may steer humans to fall on the same hole.
School curriculum is
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vital for future generation as it play role in providing knowledge for the

students. The subject in the curriculum that will
be taught
in school has become a
hotly
-debated

topic that
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often
divides opinion.
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say that school should set out
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science
and technology

knowledge as it is
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very
crucial in this modern
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world
.
Yet
others
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think
that
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History
should
still
be taught
as they can
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give
a better understanding of the
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world
. The following essay takes a look at both

sides of the argument.

It cannot
be denied
that
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technology
is here to stay in our society. The development of technology

and scientific knowledge are predominant in
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today
's
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world
. It brings the
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human
quality of life to an

unforeseen level. As
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science
and
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technology
can solve any issue in the
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world
over the period. The

founding of much medical treatment and the growth of
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technology
that
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help
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human
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lives
are

examples of the importance of
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science
.
Furthermore
,
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Many
claim that
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science
can
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give
an objective

point of view as
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science
was proven
with reliable methods and scientific reasoning. It can
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give
better

projection in the future and deny any conjecture.
For example
, thanks to
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science
and technology,

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people
nowadays can anticipate natural disasters with disaster early warning systems.

Nevertheless
, we cannot exclude
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history
from the education curriculum. The ignorance to pay

attention to
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history
can lead
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to fall on the same mistakes. Studying the past can
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give
us the

understanding that our present situation is neither natural nor inevitable.
For instance
,
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humans
took

a chance on the industrial revolution to create modern warfare.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
misused the creation

of industrial
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technology
as a tool for destruction. By reflecting and studying
closely
on history,

humans can be more aware of the ethics of using
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technology
in the coming era.

To sum up,
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science
and
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technology
proficiency is on-demand in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
's
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world
as society is trying to

solve
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many
global problems.
However
,
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history
is
still
an indispensable subject. Excluding
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history
on

educational discussion may steer
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humans
to fall on the same hole.
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IELTS essay Some people think that in the modern world, getting old is entirely bad. Others, however, think that life of elderly in the modern world is much better than it was in the past.

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6 paragraphs
346 words
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